Suicidal Thoughts

Replied to Dil J, MC Uski, and Formula MC
Sorry..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97209
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97424
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97412
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MethodZ
Does anyone like me?…or does my life seem like its not worth shit.
I don't get respect…my world is starting to be the opposite to perfect.
Im afraid to go to school because I keep getting bullied and teased.
I keep thinking to myself…if I died would they be pleased?.
If I was to kill myself there would be no pain and depression.
No more stressing…it would teach the hatred and bullies a lesson.
The days of walking home with cut lips and bloody noses.
Shirts as red as roses…and the threats if I ever exposed it.
Nights of crying & my family just stared and laughed…it never helped.
Maybe I was a babie but would I have the guts to kill myself.
Now I rap to let out my inner pain…but now I get called a wigger.
So what is the real purpose of life…fuck ill jus pull the trigger.

Chorus:
When Your Down And Out And Your Left With No One
You Think That Your Only Option Is Grabbing A Gun
Your Left Thinking Would It Matter If You Were To Die
Think Of Any Means Necessary To Commit Suicide

Speek.E.Z.
With The Trigger To My Head, All This Pressure Wants Me Dead..
Only Way Out Is Biting The Bullet And Tasting The Lead..
My Parents Said I Am Good For Nothing, My Grades Reflect It..
Girl Just Dumped Me, Said I Was No Good, Just What I Expected..
Why Can't I Ever Have Any Fun Amongst All This Pressure..
With All My Parents Standards It's No Wonder I Never Measure..
I Just Can't Handle All This Stress, My Life Is Such A Mess..
From A Young Age My Parents Even Told Me How To Dress..
It’s Madness I Confess, The Way I Struggle Through The Strife..
I Wonder Will God Take Me In? Will There Be Another Life..
Or Should I Take This Knife And End My Life With This Release..
Because The Only Thing I Ever Wanted Was To Rest In Peace..

Chorus:
When Your Down And Out And Your Left With No One
You Think That Your Only Option Is Grabbing A Gun
Your Left Thinking Would It Matter If You Were To Die
Think Of Any Means Necessary To Commit Suicide

Shit..Ill stuff...I really elt Meth'z emotion in this...Made me shad a tear...ha ha...nah, really good piece

YO FEELIN WHAT BOTH U SAYIN. ILL META'S IN SPEEKS VERSE BUT SUM DEEP FEELINS IN METHODZ.

PEACE OUT

thought this came good as a collab..both stayed on topic nicely and showed meaning in ya words....nice vocab n metas....good work....pZ...

yo yeah this was deep, u doggz dont even need 2elevate, tha way i see it is that yooz got talents, i feel this man right in my heart like!

NIce....

dis piece wus well done.......keep dat shyt up!!......n keep droppin ur spits!!.......n elevate!

yo lets up this

yea ok.... bout damn time!

MethodZ...my man my man....
your verse definetly had some nice imagry, that goes without saying. The rhyme scheme and flow were both consistent...the syllabul count did fall off about 2 times that i saw

Nights of crying & my family just stared and laughed…it never helped.

^biggest example

Hook...
nice and simple, right to the point...good

EZ...
You took my advice, good job. The read is much better with the commas to space out your words... imagry was decent here, content did it for me here...

overall...
you both did good jobs, id just suggest on your next collab, or just next topic, find a way to flip the topic...see how well you guys are when you need to think from a point of view that isnt expected

ohh...and i wouldnt kill myslef for what happend to those kids...unless i was Shemy

aiight
this piece was a nice one,
methodz came strong with the emotion, and created some nice scenes with his wordplay.

and speek e z, didnt come weak, so why is no 1 mentioning his verse, you had some nice, emotion an immagery.
aiight

not really much to criticize.

peace

reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks

UPPIN THIS
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speek we dope lets do another collab :) LOL

YO! i really enjoyed dis peice seein as i wrote a song simular 2 dis
it wuz all sick an i enjoyed seein da hook thrown in da mix
it struck close 2 home an i hope 2 c more
check out my flow at

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97601

Word this was a pretty dope drop on both parts ... 1st verse had a simple rhyme scheme but after readin' it I seen it didn't really need a more complex one ... 2nd verse E.Z. focussed on multi's more that Methodz did ... Which made it more interestin' to read ... Both came with good thoughts on this collab ... Props to both of ya'll ... Keep doin' ya'lls thing ... Peace

UPPIN AGAIN.....VOTE IF U THINK THIS SHOULLD BE IN LEGENDS LOL

i dont know about legends, but this is good from both
trust me guys, flip the topic next time

it will do wonders for your sex life