Topic: Converted Lifestyle
Due Date: dec 12th
Voting ends: dec 15th
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Topic: Converted Lifestyle
Due Date: dec 12th
Voting ends: dec 15th
The wiseman man once said...
"The man who checks in 1st always wins"
CHECK!
The Wisest Man of them all once said...
"Whoever posts after Kerr eats shit and dies"
A wiser man once said...
"Fuck You Kerr"
check.
^^^hahahha boo
lol...nice try with the edit, but like year long tans..
you remain sunned.
Suburban area, Precicely paved streets
Million dollar mansions, Luxury sweets
Wealthy people keeping to theirselves
Only trouble aroused was sewage breakdowns
On the outskirts of the city, Where i matured
Play in playgrounds, Participated in sports
Brought home decent grades, Contained my behavior
I went to a christian school, "Jesus my Lord and Savior"
Over n over it consumed my mind
Therefor whenever in trouble, There's light in sight
But the nights, so dark, so cold
It's a knife instead of a gun i behold
I moved into the most dangerour part of town
Where jumpoffs, shootings, and robberies broke out
Walking alone is scarce, I tremble in fear
Conqour my fear? how... when family is killed each year
A school boy, I thought deeply within
Not frantic anymore...If I converted to 1 of them
My knife shined bright, No sight of blood
Never needed or used it, Forever layed under the rug
The situation comes, Sinful actions began
Stole neckalces, And countless diamonds
I scared them, Damn i fealt strong
They were like me, Baring to hold on
All n all my agressive style caught up
I was in rehab for consumin random drugs
Served house arrest for dishing them about
My mother just cussed...and threw me out
I was in a feeble stage, Psyco prone
Nobody will grant a hand, I'll do it on my own
Ma gon' get it, I flashed my gun...
I usta be a kid...But now i'm on the run
**keeeyed cuz its a friday and i was out*
i used to wait for the moment to live..now i live for the moment
my moment hasnt already passed.. i just chose to postpone it
craving vengeance against myself..hating what i had become
shadow boxing with my shadow..but it beat me to the punch
compassion? i had some..painting perfect pixels out of anger
just because i cant believe..that i EVER called Jesus my savior
the man was nothing, and i chose to foolishy follow his falacies
fuck 'What Would Jesus Do', ive decided to adopt my own policy
Father promised me, 'the path to heaven is through the bible'
yeah? well there was a detour..where am i going? Hell if i know
victory pose for this ex-devout Christian and his depleting faith
yes. there is a God..but its hard to know which religion is true..
when false prophets and Sons are laced.
turn the page in the book of my life..itll be what i make it..
Signed: Daniel Perrigo....Hardcore Christian turned soon-to-be athiest
votes?
Thrust..vote on every battle with me tomorrow so some people will vote on this one.
No contest in my eyes
thrust came way to basic in his rhyme sceme (some didn't rhyme or flow and all)
and with the plot he laid out the images throughout the entire piece
dez came poetic and complex and made it extra clear in the last bar just in case, good flow and wordplay
average take on the topic, but you made it work with the content
'craving vengeance against myself..hating what i had become
shadow boxing with my shadow..but it beat me to the punch'
^dopeness
Vote - Dez
i don't really know why you are hating on it so bad...
i mean...is it cuz i use short lines?... they don't hafta be longer
look at Aus n Sureal... they all use short lines
but...
votes
Thrust..you came dope, using nice lines and a nice view of seeing your piece. You had alot of the shit I expected to be in a piece. Same with Dez, so basically I have to give this to more creativity, and I think Dez edged it out. He used some nice metaphors as did Thrust, but when it came to creativity, Dez won to me.
Vote-Dez
Wow..
Thrust..
you came ight actually.. nothing real special but you came
nice none the less.. still improving which is good to see..
didn't really hook me into the story, n' you coulda been more
complex with it.
Dez..
this shit was sick.. got me hooked within the first 2 lines
of your shit.. really really nice piece for being a keystyle..
v/ Dez
Wow Dez got this wasnt really much a of a contest even when u keyed it wow Good use om multies metas and had the best creativity in this battle
Thrust you alsoo had a good verse but it lacked the creativity that Dez had srry but ima go wit Dez on this one
hit my SS one up plzz
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