Memphise

I'm only down for MEM so come on bitch let me in
I no how ta smoke that hay cuz I do it every day
hit that blunt wit that chronic funk the supera snoics
creepen in and out the cut all the real bitches no how ta suck
so watch when ya her my flows cuz yo ears might explod
flows comen from everywhere this boy maken niggas scared
shooten em wit my mouth they don't no what I'm about
repen for the dirty south
memphis comen stright your way we bout ta make yo day
letten niggas hear my flows
letten everybody no when I come and take they Ho
showin how pimpens done smoken blunts and haven fun
hitten bitches from the back cuz I love ta hear they ass clap
Ya'll no me so ya'll need ta respect me
respect is what I gotta have
so bitch back up yo maken me mad
money isn't in my eyes and fame hasn't got me hypnotize
so come run up on me if you dare
cuz really hommie I don't care
cuz I got frount line niggas every where
Pimps and Playa no how I roll
pimpen hos and smokne DRO
we don't give a fuck what u think
cuz you'll be the one fixen my sink
so don't blink when we run up on ya
hit u in the head so u can still be an organ dona
and your bitch wishen I was hers
cuz u aint shit but a neard and u no its obsurd
cuz all u nigga aint shit and all u wanten my dick
cuz I"m fucken your bitch every night maken her scream so loud its maken me look outta sight
and u might think u can but u can't
and u can take that to the bank
cuz all u can be is a fake
they all no I'm the only one
so fuck yo if you dont feel me
cuz I'm done


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This was alright....but you need to work on your structure a little bit though, try making your lines a little longer and the long ones short, and make them around the same length so its structured good....flow was ok, could have been better, add some multies and internals to help that out though...overall this was ok but just elevate...keep at it.

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nice but structure and flow need a bit of work