rule (Soft Focus) vs LM (D.O.I)

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Verse Due Dec 9th.

Topic: Unimagineable Nightmares

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chekcin in................................................ .................................................. ..

good luck LM

I'm unprepared haunted by mercyless demons
Leaving me in aginy my soul itself is screaming
Trapped in a fantasie of the devils hate children
I can't adapt to visons of how people killed 'em
Although I close my eyes I see the lost flesh
Ghost asking my dreams to resurect death
Minds losing piece by piece by lose of sleep
I was a rose from concrete now a lost sheep
My peddles falling my medow is a graveyard
Hearing souls calling think it was braveheart
All because of the scene my mind repeats
Over and over of sleeping with dead beats
Fetish to see beyond normal who now dwell
Help comunicate with souls trapped in hell
Struggle in my mind why this painful torture
Did I do something to provoke the dead culter
Is this a blessing to talk to souls from the past
A gift a chance to break the obscene glass
Closing my eyes is dandersous or so it seems
The devils work? Or god like angel like beams
While I sleep I can't answer different questions
Tryen to understand dead is my godly lessons
Theres no bliss while i'm asleep i'm worried
For am I even alive or actually really burried
All in all thus does not matter but i'm gifted
My resting curiosities I vow to keep restricted
They ask me questions of how tobe reincarnated
Jeezus has spoken to me an why god retaliates
With thunder from the oceanly sky
Every drop of rain another human dies
Crazy I can hardly believe it myself
Horryfing me it's preventing my good health
I'm losing hold of my bodily control
Let the spirites free why am i consoled
Leaving me sweating grasping for air..
Good and evil trapped in my mind..im scared
Unprepared i'm losing my thoughts of christ
Blood over love I hate my p.m to a.m life
Trully believe i encounter the spirites of god
Who didn't make it hell or heavon lost in the fog
I pray that these souls be free sent up stairs
For i'm dieing in my sleep....
From these Unimagineable Nightmares

hope this is good.....

I've just found this I didnt know it had been set up. I'll post ASAP.............................................. ........

All these devils and goblins surround me every night...
It's a relief when I open my eyes to the mornin light...
Coz my chest feels tight everytime this darkness falls...
The worst place is inside these 4 bedroom walls...
But exhaustion calls so I've got to be brave...
I've got to sleep or I'll go to an early grave...
A good nights sleep is all I crave but it doesnt come...
They say god punishes people's sins, what have I done...
All I wanna do is run and never stop or look back...
Coz it feels like my dreams have been hijacked...
Once, my life was intact, I was a happy child...
But that changed when my sleep became more wild...
All my fears piled on to me and now I feel like I've fell...
I've sliped, stumbled all the way down to this hell...
And It's hard to tell If I'll ever make it up to heaven...
Coz my nights have been like this since the age of 11...
My membrane has been severed, and I'm loosin concentration...
I hate to shut my eyes coz I know these will soon be comencin...
And I'm sensin that these unamaginable nightmares...
Are always gonna be there...

Peace!!!

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good battle...nice reads by both

but honestly i think rule won with better metaphors and vocab that was precise...no hate at all

hit this up wit honest vote please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=93220

apreciated...but ye need ta poll vote...

uppen

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ask a mod to edit the poll.............................................. ...................................

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I pm'd Ed so hopefully he'll fix it

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yea..........rule just had better punchlines.........and they was more consistent

punchlines - rule
flow - tie
structure - tie
topic consistency - tie
vocab/complexity - tie
metas - lm
opener - rule
closer tie
overall - rule

hit this battle up honestly

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97408

vote doesnt count - punches in a topical????? i believe u didnt read. -feeble

dammit thats two of you now who didnt post a poll......assholes lol............................................... .................