'how to get rich' (my first piece)

Check it,

Man I’ll teach you how to get rich if your poor like shit bitch,//
Don’t be ashamed of it mayne-if u want cash then just suck my dick//
See ima gentlemen I say please when I ask 4 something//
Lady please can you bone me, I need some pussy or sumting//
Never bow down to bitch I’ll trip like I’m shit//
Spittin rhymes like ima that trick faital naah I stick true bitch//
You wanna know how to make a million in less than 1 year//
Common let me teach you….//

Never get tied down, mayne yo money gone//
Take money rather then make it, naah bitch I aint wrong//
U c the tax mans a bitch an his quick to take your doe//
So u see 80 be hittin shots with my hoes and killing foes//
All them tricks who hait me can suck my dick//
I been hot from the start I aint even started off yet//
Do you even know how to shoot a gun, mayne I fucking teach ya//
Niggas fink ima soft coz ima in england, but blam I aint soft I just shot ya//
Gangster fucking hoes that all you niggers be spitting//
Fake living always dreaming, most of yaahl be fucking fronting//
Coming on this site like you so fucking hard//
U probably wanking off, lack of pussy huh, u fucking retard//
See the way to be rich like me is just so easy its un-propar//
Get on the mike and huller g-unit and every gal in the club wants to swallah//
You say you a gangster they fink you heavy and you bad//
When u be shitting yo self when u at home, u frontin, u scared of yo dad//
I know the difference between a thug and trick//
One remains poor, while the other gets rich//
U c bitch the only way to live is through chance//
Huh…, u wanna get rich?

yo 80 shots get out of england/ come in the chi and watch yo pussy ass stop breathin/ yo blood would be spilled on the door and floor/ get up and try again if you want some more/80 shots ill put in yo and call u a whore

^ Lmfao!

I cant take this piece seriously, sorry. It was a bullshit homosexual topic with basic flow and rhyming words of two syllables or less. If you cant pout the effort in to write, im not putting the effort in to reply indepth.

Sorry.

reply to three open mics and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks.

maven sucks and camarac you sound like a nerd or somethin,"2 syllabyls or less" what does that matter in rap? you know how many muthafuckas post on the corna and rap and cant spell they names?

You say you a gangster they fink you heavy and you bad//
When u be shitting yo self when u at home, u frontin, u scared of yo dad//

hahah, that was real as fuck, I be meetin niggas all day that be really weak as fuck, man, thats just some plain ole real shit, tight line

^ your a stupid fuck who knows absolutely nothing about rap. You just made an ass out of yourself in front of me, Camarac, and the whole of RB who knows anything about rap. The more syllables you rhyme, the better the line sounds, the more complex the line is, EQUALS THE BETTER THE LINE IS.

you just got owned you stupid fuck.

and yes, the open mic wasnt really that good. you only ever rhymed max. 2 syllables, the topic was played, and it didnt flow through too well. Get some originality, use some advanced rhyming techniques, and take Get Rich Or Die Tryin' out of your cd player.

3/10

to all them peeps who left me them reply's saying i'm shit all that, thanks, man i dont hate, ima use yo reply's to elevate! piece out

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Originally posted by wogzta
you just got owned you stupid fuck.

and yes, the open mic wasnt really that good. you only ever rhymed max. 2 syllables, the topic was played, and it didnt flow through too well. Get some originality, use some advanced rhyming techniques, and take Get Rich Or Die Tryin' out of your cd player.

3/10

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Settle young pup. This topic USED to be played out not anymore. Whats played out is this god daymn negative peices.. and they all sound the same. Some arent even real. You ask what makes a good peice? When its REAL and when the readers could actually feel what your spiting and it touches you.. thats what makes a good peice in my books. Altho that was his first drop it wasnt bad for his first timer.

I know the difference between a thug and trick//
One remains poor, while the other gets rich//

Jyeh thats real game. Hustling baby, pimping.. this could be interpeted many ways. You either playing or geting played, your a symp or a pimp, a thug or a trick. There is no equality in this world.

Check out his other drop

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=96136

Now thats real shyt and im feeling it that without a doubt it. Dont care how many times it rhymes. Beats half the shyt i read here in my opinion.

"Get some originality"

Thats what more then half you cats need.

"and take Get Rich Or Die Tryin' out of your cd player."

Uh..

Keep writing 80SHOTS Nice start.

Jup could be much better, ...keep writin , ...iite

everyone said it so i wont , .. = )