keystyled...thanx for feed

Im feelin' sedated, unrealated to the world as u take it
Emotionally constipated such that my pupils dialated
Virtually thaught violated like someones in my head
tellin me crazy ShIt like Light A fIrE unda the Bed
Or put ThaT GuN to the Niggas Head that wANNa keep playin
Stash the body, have a alibi wit my friend on vacation
but Man im just waitin for the day they push the limit
its vivid, all the blood on ya walls, i wish you could visit
the chamber of the joke, the screams of death makes ya choke
ill drain ya body in my tub, put CD on and Soak.....
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=93377
poll battle^

This wasn't all that bad for a keystyle.

Structure was nice

Flowed well

Could of up'd your vocabulary

Maybe slid in some multies

Good drop...

this was aight, aight.....flow and rhyme scheme was consstent and dope throughout man, a nicely flowing peice. but the content was weak and just jumped around, i couldn't get a singe message at all, that made it a boring read, like theres no reason for me to read it at all.....

return the favor

peace