"abc-slaughter''

Alphabet, im actually attacking crews in an array of apathy//
Battering boys with batteries basically because, they cant battle me//
Casualties I create, contusioned and cremated casually//
Damn dawg, this dark, demented, deranged man's dropping it drastically//
Emphatically eclectic, electric epiphanies expressed elastically// Fallacies formatted for fighting, flickering with the fastest feet//
Guys get grabbed, gagged, then gasp gruesomely, with the grappling force of gravity//
Happily hacking heaps of hapless crews with heat, with hanus heads//
I ignite like incense of infants, incredibly insane and instantaneous//
Jesters jingle jangle best, jokers jump on the jurrassic jive//
Kinetic keepsakes of kamikazes killed with knapsack knives//
Ludicrous losers get lubricated lines of latitude, to lames lacking lives//
A malicious mastermind making meticulous murderous mockeries//
Napalm nectared nailfiles, a nervous necrophiliac suffering from neuropathy//
Oftenly offering operations, im the oracle, so get off a me//
Probably properly poppin these precised parlays of perfection//
Quadratic qualifications, quite quickly released in quotations of questions//
Resting, rapidly, rabidly, radioactively, to rip a man till ridicule//
Sacrificing suckas the simple plan and to slice with scissor hands and syllables//
Trashing in timberlands its typical, my tactics for when thunder lands//
Unique ultimate uprisings get upset with uppercuts, understand?//
Vulgar vampire, verbal vulture, a vocal volcano//
Warriors wander wastelands, wavelengths wobble, walk away, WHOAH-//
Xcommunicate foes with xtreme xcrement and x rays, yo//
You young youths are yelping and yelling, and Im yawning//
I am zirconium zeppelin, zig zagged zebra, Im Zeus, the z//

YOoOooOOoOooooooOOOoo.....I want some feed-BacC.....Let me Know how i did....Is it wacK dope Or what.....1

Show some Love and give me some feed-baCc...Be honest and sincere...If it was wack,tell me straight uP...and if it was DOpe,Then the same....Good looks...1

I liked the use of words and the rhyme was tight but I couldn't follow the lines.... I ignite like incense of infants, incredibly insane and instantaneous//
Jesters jingle jangle best, jokers jump on the jurrassic jive//
Kinetic keepsakes of kamikazes killed with knapsack knives//

i would love to hear some of this shit on audio tho, to hear what it sounds like, im sure it's hot...
try to use other topics when u write your rhymes, and don't use too many words that sound alot alike....

Thanks Man.....Ur a good persOn Cus u'z was Honest.....Gimmie some more feed-Back......1

Aight man....No doubt,Thanks for the feed-BaCC.....Let me know what you think....be honest with me....1

i really liked this, i loved the idea, very original, good vocab and rhyme structure, 1 thing u need to work on is stay on an idea but this was peice was ill anyways
hit my peice up called change of heart and mind