Bars/Bullets

Bars=black, Bullets=red

Verbal ryhthem presicisly in tuned with the beat/
Full clip jammed inide of a empty gun/
Awating for the perfect time just to speak/
I can't wait to see this nigga,he bet not run/
My time come,as soon as the music breaks/
I caught this busta,begging is way too late/
I spit a few bars,about 6 or 7/
Another nigga who family say he went to heaven/
The chorus comes,this is what makes or breaks a song/
The hooks come with their flamers on/
I spit a few more bars,like that in a snappy/
I bust at the cops feeling real trigger happy/
The beat skips,this messes up my flow/
I ran out of bars I can't spit no mo'/
Then I drop the mic to the floor/
The murderer,is breathing no more/

Please do not read until 12:00.I dont wont to be banned!!

lol tight peace twin i liked it even the poetic stanza but what is the real subject?

I'll tell you at 12:00..I accindently created 2 new topics and I might get in troube if Sureal see's this
So please stop posting until 12:00

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Originally posted by younggadget
I'll tell you at 12:00..I accindently created 2 new topics and I might get in troube if Sureal see's this
So please stop posting until 12:00

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Lmao..........U wont get banned.............But if Sureal sees this , he will close this thread

I dont want it closed...I want it to saty open
do you know how annoying it is entering that vb code over and over again?....lets get some comments about this peice...fuck it.....

IT REaDS 335 AM HERE

it's 10:44 in detroit...but hey...like I said fuck it...

PEEP MY JOINT BATTLEN MYSELF IT IS MY BEST WORPLAY PEACE

this was uh decent..... i thought you were gonna keep going on and off with the flow like a poem but you broke off and just fucked that up.. didn't really see what you were trying to do here... pleae explain if you can.

Okay,you got to pay attention...
The bars are the bullets...whenever the dude spit a few bars,the other dude shoot a few bullts...when the chorus come,the police comes...another word for chorus and hook,and that's a nickname for the police...hooks...when the dude stop rappin and drop the mic...the other dude dies....it was just a lil idea that popped in my head....

pretty creative bruh.. sweet daw.. sweet! i didnt get it at first.. but you explained it well.. that's some creativity daw! keep comin up wit that shit! but next time.. make us muhfuckuhz guess what the hell you tryin tuh get through.. take it easy MC.. i'm outtie!

it was creative,good drop,liked the concept, a very different concept and all. It did sorta breakoff towards the end, thats the only problem i had with it.

uppin for more replies...check out my other open mic...thats ill too...well in my opinion..