Just a wack verse i wrote.....

clearin' my throat....as the crowd grow's impatient
they 'bout to find out that I'm iller than the English Patient
they think I'm nuthin' but a nerd cursed
but they gon' get a huge shock when i drop my first verse...
......
i spit ill shit, so y'all scared of my saliva
i'm the 'future' of rap -might as well call me Mikhi Phifer
flow too tight for you to even imagine
i'm so hard, i made Shaft turn his badge in
niggaz wanna bite every line that i spit, every rhyme
it's aight........ i come up with tighter shit every time
you wanna doubt me, it's cool, MCM don't give a fuck
and i got some news for you hypocrites...you suck
......
i never gave a fuck before, and i still don't
smoked this blunt about a year ago...and i'm still stoned!


-MCM





tell me wat u think.........

nice verse man, if ya wanna battle me just holla in bitch slapped or shut the fuck up braggin bout ur shyt

This was an ok little "prop yaself" verse...

You should kinda be slapped for using 'Mekhi Phifer' in ya rhyme when Eminem already did it before you...

But I guess it's forgivable.

The ending was tight...

I liked that and can relate...

Nice metas, but use a touch of wordplay here and there.

Pretty ok verse, dog.

Peace

yo nyce verse but u used some shit off otha rappers but overall a nyce verse overall pretty good

keep dat shit comin dawg

aiight Peace (v)

decent drop, flow was decent, vocab was decent but could be better, wordplay was ok but could be better...structure wasnt bad....content was decent but could have been a lil better...overall it was well, decent..keep dropping and elevating kid...i'll look for more of your shit...


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Ok..........

It's been awhile since I've been back, but it looks like your newer. If this was your first on here, it wasn't bad.

Your vocab needs more work. It will give your piece a bigger lift.

You didn't run all the lines together, which makes it way easier to read.

You should also use more multi's in your lines. The flow was good, but some more multis in there woulda made the piece a good first drop.

Bring more stuff out on here. Use them multis too man....

Overall, just an average piece.....lets see more


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