another flow

tell me wut yall think of
this basic flow


eh yo, tha kid stay hot from morning 2 night/
wheter it's in tha looks or spitting on tha mic/
young don, sittin' on crome spinnin'/
rockin' epensive linen, car full of women/
4eva stay grinnin', i got a good life man/
lord willin' i'll have a long life span/
i act so rudely, u can't make a fool of me/
cats try n' i leave they past exposed like nudity/
in tha coldest jewlery, i stay floosed out/
yeah ur cars winnin' 'til i pump tha NOS out/
speed by ur ass in tha game of life/
overlap u twice, c'mon nigga that ain't right/
grown men tryin' 2 take my title/
yeah, all them cats up on american idol/
it's funny, niggas spit wack bars, n' say they shit was flame/
take this clue, no MC alive iz fit 4 my pain/
tha spit will drive u insane, make u braindead/
u couldn't understand me even if we had tha same head/
triggers, triggers, niggas iz 4eva sqeezin' 'em/
then when they get aimed at by a thug, they start pleading man/
i mean damn, if u a gangsta be a man about it/
niggas iz fine on givin' niggas death, 'til there lifes around it/
if u live by suthin' u die by that, no sympathy/
so ur ass gunna die in shit if u talk shit 2 me/

rate it 1-10 n give me sum feedback

i like it... i'd give it anywhere between an 8 or 9
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u said it yaself basic

nice punches, kinda basic but it made me laugh so its a 7-8,

I need some feedback on my Open mic, someone peep this

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=66947