Week 8: Lenox 0-2 vs. JEM. 2-4 jem wins

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@JEM. @Caged

in. 10.

@Caged jem sent me 10

@Caged chill. U got til tn.

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
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Ur lucky I’m busy you stupid faggot I’d body u any day, I want u next week I’ll fucking murder u

JEM

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees
Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch
Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt
U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one
We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.

v. jem for effort. i liked the jb bar. not much else concept wise

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Meth

JEM

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees

ok

Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch

lmao

Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt

nah

U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one

ehh

We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.

ok

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by Caged

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.

cancer/horriscope angle been done, but the crab flip was creative, nice

plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.

this wp doesnt work for me, i dont think anyone says it like that? maybe an accent thing but i dont think so

face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.

nah lazy wording and not fresh enough

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10

for shame

Ur lucky I’m busy you stupid faggot I’d body u any day, I want u next week I’ll fucking murder u

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lenoxs crab bar was cool, rest of his verse lacked. jem had a full verse and had a nice bar sprinkled w jabs

v jem

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.

best 3 bars i've read from u yet. retard was a creative idea just didnt like where u went with it

vs

Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch

this was cool, deniro and adele were ok enough to beat the incomplete verse

vote JEM

Caged:

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
2/5 ok

plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
3/5 nice

face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
1/5 don't like this one.

6 POINTS TOTAL


JEM:


I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees

2/5 ok

Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch

2.5/5 solid

Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt

1/5

U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one

1/5 not feeling this one

We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.

2/5 ok

8.5 points total, since you've got more bars I will score ur three best bars vs caged his bars which leads to the following:

6 points vs 6.5 points, vote goes to Jem, close call tho' feel as if this would have gone the other way if we had two complete verses but we will never know for sure!

Thanks for the free and easy vote this week, boys.

Didn't know this was a clusterfuck till I opened the thread. So here we go.

Yo homies! It's H&D - your favorite voter!

In order to make sure my votes are fair in the eyes of the great @Cheese cake Assassin, I want to remind you of my voting methodology:

For each bar, I give you a score. I break the bar down into four categories and total 'em up. That's your score.

For each category, 0 means it doesn't exist or I hate it. 1 means it is what I expect. 2 means it is above and beyond what you typically see in our league. So it is "HOT FIYA" as @Barcotic would say.

0 is a shitty bar with literally nothing in it. 4 would be the score I expect to give most "good" bars. These are bars I dig. 7 is probably one of the hottest bars I've ever seen.

ONE THING YOU SHOULD KNOW is that I WANT to give you a 7 on every bar. I want you to write dope shit and I want to read / be inspired by your dopest bars. So don't take low scores as me hating. Instead, I am trying to show you where I would like you to improve. Not because I am the rap grandmaster, but because I am forced to read all your fucking garbage. So I might as well some great rap music.

[B]IF YOU FEEL I MISSED SOMETHING, PM ME. I will update my vote.

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Originally Posted by Caged

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
0: Scheme - End rhyme is clean. No real inners. I go super stingy with scheme points, so 0 is par.
0: Concept - Gang bars are just kinda gay. Horoscope and gang bars I don't love.
1: Wordplay - I guess crab counts
1: Execution - Super low one but I bumped it to one because I zero'd concept.
2: Total bar score

plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
0: Scheme -
0: Concept - So I don't love the concept. I like the wordplay. And I think that's an important distinction to make.
1: Wordplay - I fuck with it.
0: Execution - The setup practically gave you free multis. You didn't take em. Execution on the punch was kinda whack. No real setup.
1: Total bar score - Basically gave you a point for cool wordplay

face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
I mean I don't have to really rate this right?

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Ur lucky I’m busy you stupid faggot I’d body u any day, I want u next week I’ll fucking murder u

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by Meth

JEM

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees
0: Scheme - The end rhyme didn't even rhyme. Fuck you JEM. Lazy. This is lazy.
1: Concept - So the concept ITSELF is pretty cool.
1: Wordplay - It's a low low one. But there is wordplay here
1: Execution - The first half of the punchline is clean enough. The rest of the bar is kinda lazy.
3: Total bar score - Good concept, kind of lazy execution

Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch
0: Scheme -
2: Concept - Ok. I laughed. Cuz I just read the dude's verse and voted on it and every bar was about current events. I think this is being generous but you don't have an opponent so I don't have to moderate my own numbers too closely.
1: Wordplay -
1: Execution - I liked the wording of the punch. The setup wasn't a haymaker.
4: Total bar score - Honestly? You should have saved this. Worded better this is a fire ass punch. This is a haymaker in waiting and you dropped it on a no show.

Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt
0: Scheme -
0: Concept -
0: Wordplay -
0: Execution -
0: Total bar score - Not really, but it is super lazy

U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one
0: Scheme -
1: Concept - Super weak one
0: Wordplay - You're not getting points for this.
0: Execution -
1: Total bar score

We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.
0: Scheme -
0: Concept - Honestly feels like you wrote two bars for him, then saw his verse and were like fuck this.
1: Wordplay - Existed
0: Execution - You know this though
1: Total bar score

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VOTE JEM. This may as well have been a no show and should be treated as such.

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
This was cool
plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
This was cool but ur set up was lame tbh. Doing everything for a buck? arent we all? jab at best here
face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
Played wordpay..seemed rushed

VS

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees
Cool
Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch
This was cool concept but wasnt harsh and worded weird
Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt
nah
U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one
this needed to be tweaked. Seems too simple needed that harsher angle. Miss
We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.
yeah this was alright ...


Overall- shame lennox didnt show he could have taken this. JEM didnt have a strong verse this week, trying a different style. He needs to be more hars/Witty hes got cool concepts they just didnt hit. But he wins for meeting the Line limit and putting in effort

v/jem

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Originally Posted by Caged

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
i cringe every time U say nigga but this was ok
plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
similar to wp ive done, but weak usage
face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
rushed filler
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no
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no

no good punches
1 jab
4 misses

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vs

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Jem

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees
not feelin it
Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch
lol cool
Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt
no
U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one
no
We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.
ok

1 good punch
1 jab
3 misses

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v/jem

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Originally Posted by Caged

horoscope tells me ur a wack fgt. stop acting like a beast & such.
JEM’s a fkn cancer, & he’s not the first crab nigga I had to beat this month.
Lol dumb but cool. I like this bro
plus he’s a hoe too. Doing everything for a buck. His life’s past gone.
U ain’t even getting a century tard. Cuz ya bloodline been broke for that long.
Loll Lenny dropping heat
face it, u like dick. Bet his favorite sports team the Nicks..
every time he see girls it puts his hardaway, he’d rather chill with his bf Tim.
Lol nice wp but ended it bad imo
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Ur lucky I’m busy you stupid faggot I’d body u any day, I want u next week I’ll fucking murder u

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by Meth

JEM

I’ll smack you after the match if you dap me
Cuz for Deniro, a bronx tale is taking you out like the yankees
Aiight cool
Pin you to an electric fence to shake the rust
Such a deadly current event, it’s a concept for a Joe Boston punch
Lol dumb but cool
Joogs lil bro, same approach but different stunt
Cuz Greedy TAKES shit, you just a STFU selfish ass cunt
Coulda been better
U A Phony! Bar game funny.. spiking his punch
Like a bitch fake id’ing in a club when she’s over twenty one
Lmao not strong, more of a statement but funny.
We different. Gun bar typing on a dell punk
IF I adele, it’s mad bullets rolling deep into ya gut.
Dont get it

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Got Jem for having an all around decent, clever verse.

If Lenny had the time to drop he may have had a chance cause his first two were good imo

v/Jem

JEM wins 6-0