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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...91#post8538091Quote:
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...OPEN-FOR-VOTES
I'll take black hornet to a black forest making hornets mad
and if hornets black, that's because i left his corpse like that
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I'm wack, your shakiesha - let me throw the shovel at em'
because he digs his own gaves. ask him, his cousin is dad to him
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Your avatar has more action then what you get, but i get what u meant
with a Hor' i nothing but Net' - you nutting fisting gents
(look for yourselves)
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your skating on thin ice so when it crack i know you can't swim.. float then!
but wait. you can't flow with waves, we know you only surfing blackwhore.net
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so 2005 and no accomplishments, then what you chokin on mic' for.
its because the pest-in-sight i fight gets caught in a pesticide war
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^that was weak for a reason because what a hornet got to flex?
you got the wingspan the size of a pez with a jellyrancher size chest!
-lbvs-
He pretense- to be a boss while saying he wouldn’t sell out, it’s a fact that paper rules,
u just CAN'T make money, bum, poor forever’s a better suit cus Money’s just not made for u,
changed your sig cus it was too ugly, either way you getting thumbs down,
Cus ur whole life’s a duality, ur a talking oxymoron, u even look like a sad clown,
Dude my bombs hurt, im savage ask if ur moms recovered I have a knack to wreck blondes worse,
I’ll Slash one mic, he’ll get more nas -from voters like he just rapped at a Guns n’ Roses concert,
think u really dope u got a wild imagination for a brain fart that turned into a stain on your coat,
but because youre half retarded, damn, I feel pity bro……………so I won’t mention your videos,
you’re typical, average at best- ill hound you into following the sheep I heard,
graphic with flows? too bad we cant image in the last time u had a decent verse,
i de-bunk ur messages- parlour n' pimp you on the streets call you Michelle Davis
cus when you labeled under Blacks whore-net it's definitely as mic-sell-aneus
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...OPEN-FOR-VOTES
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...OPEN-FOR-VOTES
up.
I'll take black hornet to a black forest making hornets mad
and if hornets black, that's because i left his corpse like that
dope flow, cool punch
I'm wack, your shakiesha - let me throw the shovel at em'
because he digs his own gaves. ask him, his cousin is dad to him
not feeling this
Your avatar has more action then what you get, but i get what u meant
with a Hor' i nothing but Net' - you nutting fisting gents
(look for yourselves)
dope set up line, not so dope punch
your skating on thin ice so when it crack i know you can't swim.. float then!
but wait. you can't flow with waves, we know you only surfing blackwhore.net
cool punch
so 2005 and no accomplishments, then what you chokin on mic' for.
its because the pest-in-sight i fight gets caught in a pesticide war
not feeling this
^that was weak for a reason because what a hornet got to flex?
you got the wingspan the size of a pez with a jellyrancher size chest!
soft jab
Vs
He pretense- to be a boss while saying he wouldn’t sell out, it’s a fact that paper rules,
u just CAN'T make money, bum, poor forever’s a better suit cus Money’s just not made for u,
i see the concept but this was a stretch. Needs to shorten up bar to be more effective
changed your sig cus it was too ugly, either way you getting thumbs down,
Cus ur whole life’s a duality, ur a talking oxymoron, u even look like a sad clown,
wasnt feeling this
Dude my bombs hurt, im savage ask if ur moms recovered I have a knack to wreck blondes worse,
I’ll Slash one mic, he’ll get more nas -from voters like he just rapped at a Guns n’ Roses concert,
set up line has nice multis. Dope punch/wordplay. Liked the nas/nahs part. Definitely Lotb
think u really dope u got a wild imagination for a brain fart that turned into a stain on your coat,
but because youre half retarded, damn, I feel pity bro……………so I won’t mention your videos,
not feeling this
you’re typical, average at best- ill hound you into following the sheep I heard,
graphic with flows? too bad we cant image in the last time u had a decent verse,
ok hit
i de-bunk ur messages- parlour n' pimp you on the streets call you Michelle Davis
cus when you labeled under Blacks whore-net it's definitely as mic-sell-aneus
decent wordplay. Punch was mehh
Quite a few misses by both but overall Mic S had less misses and was more consistent. Black Hornet had the Lotb but it wasnt enough to take this. Condense ur sentences to be more effective
V/Mic S
Mic S-
I'll take black hornet to a black forest making hornets mad
and if hornets black, that's because i left his corpse like that
(Aiight, cool)
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I'm wack, your shakiesha - let me throw the shovel at em'
because he digs his own graves. ask him, his cousin is dad to him
(Nope)
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Your avatar has more action then what you get, but i get what u meant
with a Hor' i nothing but Net' - you nutting fisting gents
(look for yourselves)
(Don't like this, bro.)
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your skating on thin ice so when it crack i know you can't swim.. float then!
but wait. you can't flow with waves, we know you only surfing blackwhore.net
(Cool, no bad)
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so 2005 and no accomplishments, then what you chokin on mic' for.
its because the pest-in-sight i fight gets caught in a pesticide war
(Needs to be cleaned up. Would have been a good punch, but the wording was bad)
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^that was weak for a reason because what a hornet got to flex?
you got the wingspan the size of a pez with a jellyrancher size chest!
(Nice closer)
-lbvs-
Black Hornet-
He pretends- to be a boss while saying he wouldn’t sell out, it’s a fact that paper rules,
u just CAN'T make money, bum, poor forever’s a better suit cus Money’s just not made for u,
(Nice)
changed your sig cus it was too ugly, either way you getting thumbs down,
Cus ur whole life’s a duality, ur a talking oxymoron, u even look like a sad clown,
(Good one)
Dude my bombs hurt, im savage ask if ur moms recovered I have a knack to wreck blondes worse,
I’ll Slash one mic, he’ll get more nas -from voters like he just rapped at a Guns n’ Roses concert,
(Too much going on. Needs to be more direct and less statement-like)
think u really dope u got a wild imagination for a brain fart that turned into a stain on your coat,
but because youre half retarded, damn, I feel pity bro……………so I won’t mention your videos,
(Lol, nice)
you’re typical, average at best- ill hound you into following the sheep I heard,
graphic with flows? too bad we cant image in the last time u had a decent verse,
(Good)
i de-bunk ur messages- parlour n' pimp you on the streets call you Michelle Davis
cus when you labeled under Blacks whore-net it's definitely as mic-sell-aneus
(No, reaching...)
Overall: Good battle from both. I know a lot of my critiques will seem hypocritical as I have structure, punchline and wording issues as well. However that allows me to be more objective during my judgement, so take it for what it's worth. Mic S, I felt your punchlines and structure was lacking and hurt your overall verse. I like your subject matter and creativity, but sharpen up punchlines and rhymes scheme and you'll be alright. Black Hornet, your bars are overly too long. They definitely need to be shortened for more effective punches, metaphors and wordplay, albeit you DID have better punches than your opponent. Mic S was bit more personal and creative, but Black Hornet had a sharper, cleaner verse and better wordplay that connected. Nice job, fellas.
Vote- Black Hornet
nothing i'd quote
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this is basically who had the better attempts, and that would be black hornet. mic needs to work on finding some more clever concepts, his best attempts were super played ideas. go read some old LLL battles to get a better idea of what to go for. Black had a couple ok concepts, but his wording is fucked. gotta make ur punches smoother to read son.
vote black hornet
MIc S
I'll take black hornet to a black forest making hornets mad
and if hornets black, that's because i left his corpse like that
.Not bad.. but not hard hitting enough
I'm wack, your shakiesha - let me throw the shovel at em'
because he digs his own gaves. ask him, his cousin is dad to him
Not really feeling this one
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Your avatar has more action then what you get, but i get what u meant
with a Hor' i nothing but Net' - you nutting fisting gents
(look for yourselves)
This could be better.. I get what you were going for tho
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your skating on thin ice so when it crack i know you can't swim.. float then!
but wait. you can't flow with waves, we know you only surfing blackwhore.net
Meh..
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so 2005 and no accomplishments, then what you chokin on mic' for.
its because the pest-in-sight i fight gets caught in a pesticide war
good flow here..
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^that was weak for a reason because what a hornet got to flex?
you got the wingspan the size of a pez with a jellyrancher size chest!
-lbvs-
Wordplay didn't really connect here. Saw what you were trying to do tho
black hornet
He pretense- to be a boss while saying he wouldn’t sell out, it’s a fact that paper rules,
u just CAN'T make money, bum, poor forever’s a better suit cus Money’s just not made for u,
Not bad
changed your sig cus it was too ugly, either way you getting thumbs down,
Cus ur whole life’s a duality, ur a talking oxymoron, u even look like a sad clown,
Nice personal
Dude my bombs hurt, im savage ask if ur moms recovered I have a knack to wreck blondes worse,
I’ll Slash one mic, he’ll get more nas -from voters like he just rapped at a Guns n’ Roses concert,
Nice punch but a little forced.. could have come off way smoother and hit harder
think u really dope u got a wild imagination for a brain fart that turned into a stain on your coat,
but because youre half retarded, damn, I feel pity bro……………so I won’t mention your videos,
forced again, but i like it.
you’re typical, average at best- ill hound you into following the sheep I heard,
graphic with flows? too bad we cant image in the last time u had a decent verse,
nice
i de-bunk ur messages- parlour n' pimp you on the streets call you Michelle Davis
cus when you labeled under Blacks whore-net it's definitely as mic-sell-aneus
meh.
I gotta give this one to BLack hornet hands down for just having a better verse
V= BLack hornet
Quote:
Originally Posted by mic s
Vote: Black HornetQuote:
Originally Posted by Black Hornet
Explanation: Mic S doesnt make any sense in half of his bars lol
I had to read Mic S verse in like a middle eastern accent, shit was choppy af, still had some punches doh. Black hornet had like a fuck ton of ideas and tried to cram them in long drawn out bars, shortening these coulda made em hit hard tho.
V/black hornet
5-1 black hornet wins