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Yo am the underdog, they underestimate me too much,
I'll burn you like logs, u so fruity, eat u, captain crunch,
Each line cracks a rib,puncture your insides, total damage of it,
Look at this kid, opened up, like I've seen in atopsy pics,
Yea it's primetime but it's mine, your's is stuck way bak in the timeline,it ain't a lie,
Yo optimous wants his last name back, ask him for the trip,
Jump on his back, in order to do that, gotta let go of knux nutsack,
You told me to elevate, giving it my best,
Didn't even hesitate, to improve my skills and surpass great,
Facing you how ironic I have to say, but its ur end u got sealed am your fate.
k...
i didnt kno we was goin thru wit this..
oh well...
keystyle...
Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit [1]
I swear like shit, i neva met a fool more weird than ripsta
he was like, yo, Prime, is it hot if i happened to fuck my sista?
Im like NO! make better use of ur time, like elevate, so we can see improvement
n so i had him climb mount everest wit no oxygen - jus to pity myself n fer amusement
bro i asked for links for crew tryouts n he linked me to his profile, damn
link me to the WWE divas site n hes like wouldn't it be hot if i gave em a body slam
u drive nascar but u finished last
its cuz u faggot ran outta gas.
ehh.
My bad bro am I really out? We wetr messing right
Here it is dudes
Yo am the underdog, they underestimate me too much,
I'll burn you like logs, u so fruity, eat u, captain crunch,
this was def. a no, failed the attempt man you had somewhat of a concept but butchered the wording, so na
Each line cracks a rib,puncture your insides, total damage of it,
Look at this kid, opened up, like I've seen in atopsy pics,
this was not a punch, you kind've just stated some shit, again failed attempt with the concept even
Yea it's primetime but it's mine, your's is stuck way bak in the timeline,it ain't a lie,
i really dont know what this was, but i had to separate it from the rest of the lines cuz i couldn't figure it out
Yo optimous wants his last name back, ask him for the trip,
Jump on his back, in order to do that, gotta let go of knux nutsack,
eh, i see the concept here so okay attemp but failed at the punch, wording was off
You told me to elevate, giving it my best,
Didn't even hesitate, to improve my skills and surpass great,
Facing you how ironic I have to say, but its ur end u got sealed am your fate.
No not at all, i dont know what this was suppose to be. Failed attempt and punch
RIPSTA- this verse was kin've weak, some of the lines didnt even rhyme man. You have to work on being more creative and coming up with some better concepts.. some of your shit was just bland, no real attempt even. you had maybe 1 decent attempt, but overall keep writing, youll elevate through time man
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Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit [1]
lol this was an ok punch, it made me laugh when i read it lol. The wording was a little off, but ok
I swear like shit, i neva met a fool more weird than ripsta
he was like, yo, Prime, is it hot if i happened to fuck my sista?
LMFAO @ this. even tho it wasn't a punch, it made me laugh and i'm just letting you know. but no punch
Im like NO! make better use of ur time, like elevate, so we can see improvement
n so i had him climb mount everest wit no oxygen - jus to pity myself n fer amusement
eh, i see the concept but the wording was real off so not real punch here man
bro i asked for links for crew tryouts n he linked me to his profile, damn
link me to the WWE divas site n hes like wouldn't it be hot if i gave em a body slam
this one kinda confused me, i see the concept in here, but it was nothing that hit real hard cuz it was worded wrong
u drive nascar but u finished last
its cuz u faggot ran outta gas.
okay i can tell you just wrote this to finish the verse. kudos lol
PRIMETIME - man i've been reading more of your shit lately and you actually aint the bad bro. You got some pretty good concepts, and a sense of humor, potential to make shit real funny you know. The ONLY thing that really hurts you is the wording, sometimes it is really really off.. but that'll pick up the more you write.. Just keep on doin ya thing and itll progress over time. Overall tho not bad verse
OVERALL- this was a ok battle, nothing special at all. i felt like rip had the potential to come decent but his wording was so off it made for a punch of failed attempts, i feel like he has to work on this creativity a bit as well as wording up his shit. Primetime, i've seen him come harder before. He's got some pretty decent concepts but the wording is just a bit off at times, i feel like if he were to come more direct and work on how he words his, he's got potential to really son some cats. okay battle here
v/ - PRIMETIME
Yo am the underdog, they underestimate me too much,
I'll burn you like logs, u so fruity, eat u, captain crunch,
Each line cracks a rib,puncture your insides, total damage of it,Quote:
concept was there, wording not
Look at this kid, opened up, like I've seen in atopsy pics,
Yea it's primetime but it's mine, your's is stuck way bak in the timeline,it ain't a lie,Quote:
nah man, no punch
Yo optimous wants his last name back, ask him for the trip,Quote:
wtf?
Jump on his back, in order to do that, gotta let go of knux nutsack,
You told me to elevate, giving it my best,Quote:
mehh, like the first bar. Concept was there, the wording wasn't
Didn't even hesitate, to improve my skills and surpass great,
Facing you how ironic I have to say, but its ur end u got sealed am your fate.Quote:
didnt rhyme, instantly killing yo bar
vsQuote:
wtf again
Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit [1]
I swear like shit, i neva met a fool more weird than ripstaQuote:
ok opener
he was like, yo, Prime, is it hot if i happened to fuck my sista?
Im like NO! make better use of ur time, like elevate, so we can see improvementQuote:
no punch but it was funny
n so i had him climb mount everest wit no oxygen - jus to pity myself n fer amusement
bro i asked for links for crew tryouts n he linked me to his profile, damnQuote:
good setup, execution was less good
link me to the WWE divas site n hes like wouldn't it be hot if i gave em a body slam
u drive nascar but u finished lastQuote:
nah man
its cuz u faggot ran outta gas.
Jeff took this. He edged it with his last bar.Quote:
Dope, LOTB
v/ J
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Yo am the underdog, they underestimate me too much,
I'll burn you like logs, u so fruity, eat u, captain crunch,
this was a weak opener
Each line cracks a rib,puncture your insides, total damage of it,
Look at this kid, opened up, like I've seen in atopsy pics,
this had a little something in it but not enough
Yea it's primetime but it's mine, your's is stuck way bak in the timeline,it ain't a lie,
Yo optimous wants his last name back, ask him for the trip,
you need to work on your rhyming not only that you need stronger wordplay
Jump on his back, in order to do that, gotta let go of knux nutsack,
You told me to elevate, giving it my best,
again you didnt rhyme
Didn't even hesitate, to improve my skills and surpass great,
Facing you how ironic I have to say, but its ur end u got sealed am your fate.
not a good closer
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Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit [1]
shorten your lines some... i think this one appealed to me b/c of the muti at the end but it could be alot better
I swear like shit, i neva met a fool more weird than ripsta
he was like, yo, Prime, is it hot if i happened to fuck my sista?
this was a weak bar
Im like NO! make better use of ur time, like elevate, so we can see improvement
n so i had him climb mount everest wit no oxygen - jus to pity myself n fer amusement
where is the wordplay in this?
bro i asked for links for crew tryouts n he linked me to his profile, damn
link me to the WWE divas site n hes like wouldn't it be hot if i gave em a body slam
i dont like this line either
u drive nascar but u finished last
its cuz u faggot ran outta gas.
was that a play on for got/faggot?... even if it was it was still lacking the wordplay to bring the punch across
vote- ripsta. i voted ripsta simply because prime really didnt top his verse. ripsta set a low bar and prime was saying rhyme like
... this hurt prime badly.Quote:
I swear like shit, i neva met a fool more weird than ripsta
he was like, yo, Prime, is it hot if i happened to fuck my sista?
pc. keep elevating
nothing
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Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit
Ripsta didnt like ya verse the wording was off concept werent that good but got u potential to be decent Jeff not going comment its obvious that u didnt try but you had one okayish bar horrible ass wording tho lol but enough to win in my eyes
vote Jeff
no sir
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nothin
PT, wtf was that dog?? i know you can drop wayyyyy better than that. dont dumb it down for the newbs dog. u makin yaself look beatable. Rip, keep practicin dog. peep some champ matchin and LLL battles.
v. PT
Unfortunately this niggas all over me, anymore hed make me lose it
he front line material, have em killed, sectioned 8 his ass & remove em from the unit
^^Way stretched but decent
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Nothin
v/Prime