Bashing You Lames!

Check these lyrical miracles that I spit at you chaps
For you typical, pitiful kids with your fictional raps
Every syllable is pivotal to the one that succeeds it
I’ll diminish ya, leave you quizzical like puzzle pieces
Schooling you imbeciles with my principal principles
No imagery lives in me but I still got lyrical visuals
I rhyme whimsical, while yours are just spherical
Not to mention miserable, wack, not even deliverable
Predictable…stay flipping more than a reciprocal
Its criminal how im killing em, so I’ll spit it to em plain
You jokers can’t hide ‘cause im the dealer in this game
The microphone is my weapon, and I have accurate aim
But im done here, im really tired of bashing you lames

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better than i expected, nice rhyme scheme and some good vocab used in there as well. multi syllable rhymes the only thing i could say is put some strong metaphors in there and/or try to incorporate more imagery.
not at all bad
rtf:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...012/index.html

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yea def. better than I had anticipating...I think it was just the right length too cuz ne more would have been repetitive and boring...but this was cool...nothing over the top but def. decent especially in the beginning...

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Nice job bro. Multis def. there, lyrically solid. Seen a few punchlines there. If I had to give any advice Id just say work on adding a few more punchlines to go with that ill flow for that DAMN factor. Nice drop fam, keep it up.

this should be getting more attention..

Nice, I guess if your going to focus on rapping about how dope you are this is how you should do it lol. The multis are dope and I like the whole rhyme scheme, vocab is great as well. Best part is probably the middle where you start playing on words a lot: "Schooling you imbeciles with my principal principles".

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Shit was tight bro. Kind of reminded me of Kurupt's rhyme scheme.

Rhyme scheme on point, metas was aiite,, multis was dope, feelin the flow, feelin the verse overall... wish you had ended it with more of a bang tho... that was the only part that disappointed me.

This was pretty dope, kinda short for my preference, but overall it was good. Multies were good, and the scheme was definitely ill as people said before, other than that the rest was aightt..nothing TOO special about this piece, but it was decent! Keep it up.

I like it. I really do.. It was just a rap about rapping but it makes me think you've got more in your arsenal when you do other topics n shit.. Kinda excited to hear momre shit from u. Keep at it, kid

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