Another Side of the Real Me

ok this is just part of a song im working on for my new mixtape.

(hook)
its just another side of the real me....
still g, still roll in a mobb deep like I was prodigy...
its just another side of the real me...
still keep the heat right where I sleep, ya feel me....

(Verse One)
Canada, Ontario thats where I make my living...
Banging in ya stereo but its scary though...
even in October there is no thanks giving...
ranks giving and taking earning ya spot in the street...
constantly looking for someone to spot you a g....
just so you can get lifted to a happier time...
like being up on stage straight rapping your rhymes...
no clapping your 9s sounds flutter threw the street....
but im still gutter enough to fuck ya motha to dis beat...
im not new to this, i stay true to this...
been banging dat piff since I came out the uterus...
your clueless trick, now listen to my music...

(HOOK)

(verse two)
I got shottys to protect my gz, please....
shit'll leave ya body all lumpy like cottage cheese...
and fuck a fed we are some mobsters...
my dude'll put the noodle to ya head like pasta...
leave it red like lobster...
no dreds but like a rostah, we cops alots of herb...
drop the illest shit you ever heard...
clever words is all im speaking while im skeet skeetin'...
on ya freak all weekend in the back of a jeep...
and I still keep the heat crack stashed in the seat...
passed the police they didnt even glance at me...
enhancing the street one suburb at a time...
take these works on mine, standin' on a curb aint worth dyin'....

(hook)

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...757/index.html
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can i get some feedback, please.

I'm definitely feeling the flow, I was able to read it over once and spit it to myself. I liked how the beginning of some lines rhymed with the end of the previous line before introducing a new syllable.
I'd drop the "while I'm skeet skeetin'" and change it either to something like "while I'm creepin" or "leave ya sleeping". I dunno how you were spitting this but "passed the police without even a glance at me" flows well in my mind.

thanks for the feedback man, that without even a glance at me does sounds good. thx for the tip, good look.

flow was tight but very short verses normally its 16 lines a verse only thing i would like to see is you rock some more multis n imo multis rocks the set duder. nice drop look forward to hearing it. u got any links to tracks u have recorded?

i got some old stuff, but nothing really new. and I only like a few of my old tracks.

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=4258071
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there is one i found.

I gotta say I was really feeling that. FLow was good and shit and I had a tune and imagined someone rapping and it sounded like something I can put in my ipod and listen.

it was decent but yhu got room for improvement
like stated above, multiz would mos def help your piece
throw in some metaphors and similes and would be fire
the flow was on point tho and da hook was good
keep it up nd return da feed if at all possible