-Haterade-(Its What I'm Drankin)

lol. This is a rap I post every now and then just to see what feedback I get from it. Would greatly appreciate any feedback, wether good or bad. lol.


A heart of gold or cold soul, we all grow old... People say I'm heartless & that I don't care... They resume their stares, so I reply with a menacing glare. You all think you know me, but you don't know my grief, when you die it'll be a relief. Then you'll suffer a fate beyond hell's gate...

Let me take some time to explain of life's cruel game... People endulge in lives that aren't their's cause they are scared, they want more for themselves so they delve... Delve into someone else's happiness, because they have none of their own, they just never stay gone... You can move away, feel forgotten... Yet these people stay rotton, just to the core, then when you come back they give you some more. How disgraceful & untasteful can you be?

All those who aim your anger at me, feel free to become my next neccessity... You think you've got me, while I'm down... You've just forgot who wears the crown... Go ahead & slander my name, it's all the same... Just as before, I'll even the score.

It'll be funny when you're thirty trying to be flirty, cause you're all dirty... Try to act fresh, when you're mess... Let me show you now bitch, I'll put you to the test to prove I'm best... Those who despise, those in disguise, even those undercover guys... They all took a shot, but you never seen me drop... Now watch as I make it back to the top... I got new games & my same ol' name. So you will know me when I march through & stomp ontop of you. With a new clique & a new crew. Keeping up with just a few...

That's right, there's new light shining down on my crown... I'm too high for you to reach you fuckin ass leech. I don't have to be on the grind to use my mind. We've left behind the past times, now watch as I grow into a success, just like I said I will be the best...

You might not have a clue as to what I say or what I do, but when I'm struttin thousand dollar suits spittin on you... You'll know that I have the money to get you knocked off, so think about that before you start poppin off.

Now I'll end it for all to hear, those who hate have all to fear, so make this a nice bidding... farewell & fuck you.


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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ic-379800.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...sh-380707.html

Sry, other two links were messed up. Heres some more. lol

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...538/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...197/index.html

Uppin

Can I get some feedback plz??

very basic concepts, originality wasnt too much there for me. confusing structure.. some nice multis is about all i was offered.. keep writing