Dont pretend your life is hard ( if its not)

first off. This song has no application to anyone here just people I know. Also, if your life really is hard then don't feel like I am saying anything to negate that.

When I hear people complaining about having it tough or falling from grace
I gotta be honest and say I just can't relate
sure I gotta lot of shit on my plate
but I have a great life thats why a smiles on my face
never had my heart break, and never had much to hate
I'm not saying it easy but for the most part its great
I aint gonna pretend that its hard cuz that belittles those who life through shit everyday

to those posers who everyone knows are pretending
try to think for a minute of who you might be offending
think about those whose lives might be ending
before you act like an asshole consider whose heart might be rending


listen I'm not here to chew anyone out
only to give heed to something people dont really think about
that when you say shit about life and get real loud
that someone is really hurting and isnt just part of the crowd

some of you deal with real shit and some of you dont
some of you might listen a bit and some of you wont
some people spit lyrics just to rock the boat
like to shove their pretentious lyrics down everyones throat
talk about their problems like they are a reason to boast
get everyones attention like they are makin a toast
indulging their own egos as if they were the host

I guess all I'm saying is that my life is just fine
and when you have it good whining is a waste of everyones time
it belittles the folks who have it rough which should be a lyrical crime
not to mention we all have to hear this fag whine

I did this completely off the top of my head in a couple minutes so it will prolly suck, but its just stuff I wanted to say.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...265/index.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...310/index.html

This was simple, but I get what you saying. It wasn't that detailed but you hold a strong enough message. Solid piece. Work on your bar lengths, it was kinda stretched.

I agree with GTech great message but very simple. Try to add in some flare to your words to make the reader interested. Some of your lines felt way too stretched to make you have a nice flow work on that. RTF on my OpenMic Recognition please.

thanks for the feed. Yeah I just wrote what was on the top of my head I definitely need to actually put some work in

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