I'm From Beneath.

I'm From Beneath.

your insane & depressed, cause sey is the best..
he came from the depths where satan is kept,
a place thats infested with plagues from the dead.
walls built with flesh we take off ya legs..
clothes made from skin, scraped from ya neck,
village of shamens chained waiting to test
evade your defence and break through ya chest.
your makin me step on stage shakin my head
trying to find the unkindest hate in my breath..
i couldn't taste it as yet,
feelin patient as my inner demon faithfully slept
taking a rest before releasin' a statement that says..
don't you dare speak of the power..
this evil is ours, easily leavin legions of cowards
beat & devoured, i don't even need to eat for an hour,
bathing in lava right before my meteor shower.
now i believe you feeble people are sour..
as im unleashing destruction to equal the towers.
the dopest omens so when its spoken releases,
3 pieces of ghosts puttin' those poems in a thesis
knowledge you'd only know when i teach it..
even holier treatment than eloping with jesus,
but they're supposed to be secrets
advocate a passageway to show who the beast is.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-373198.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...om-373244.html

Damn, ain't seen you in a while, but damn. This was dope as fuck for how long it was. You're flow was great. Nothing seemed/sounded forced. You're structre was great nothing was stretched. You're vocab wasn't basic at all which made it a better read. You're title caught my eye but it didn't seem to have much of a topic. But it was fucking dope. I'm guessing this was a keystyle to let us know your back?

Anyways, dope shit man, pz.

ill shit.. not too many great drops in om nowadays, this is a major exception. the flow was hotness, almost resembling my own.. a little difference in pacing, irregardless, i was feeling the content. definitely some boasted "don't test me, im the dark prince" shit. we'll you know your not to be fucked with, and now i know too.. lol, wordchoices kept the liveliness thriving..the eloping with jesus line was my fav... not very lengthy at all, which was my only let down. so keep blessin the forum fam, ima look out for more of your writes most def.

This shit is dope bro, consistant flow, nice vocab and rhymes.

"this evil is ours, easily leavin legions of cowards
beat & devoured, i don't even need to eat for an hour,
bathing in lava right before my meteor shower.
now i believe you feeble people are sour"

Def my favrioute bit.
Keep it up man

Sick multies, nice imagery in your metaphors, good use of vocab and you stayed on topic... Overal this freestyle was definitely sick.

One of my favorite lines:
don't you dare speak of the power..
this evil is ours, easily leavin legions of cowards

I really can't find any areas that you slacked on, so Im going to give it a perfect score: 10/10.

Pretty nice man, this was a verse packed out with multis with some strong imagery and on some threatening shit. Beware of doing multi's just for the sake of it though, sometimes you wind up stretching making sense when less can be more. You showed the makings of a topical head on this piece and it was easy to read. You've got the spark of talent man, i look forward to seeing you progress as a writer.

Keep posting.

Thanks for the feedback, forreal.. I'll hit you up.

damn.
I really enjoyed reading this - short but sweet. packed full of multis, which is one thing I love seeing in an OM drop. And on top of that it made sense and strung together well for the majority of the piece. Not really anything I can complain about, except maybe using multis so much can take away from a piece, but I don't think it really took much away here.

enjoyed this drop a lot, creative, on topic, and flowed almost flawlessly.
sick

can you hit up
The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal
it's at the top of the OM page.

Word, i'll get at it.. anymore feed?

I liked it. It had a raw feel to it so its very much just a 'fuck you im iller' verse. Nothing to really pick at. Really rather impressed.

This was nice. You have one of the best flows and rhyme schemes on the site. It was some braggadocios type shit. I enjoyed. Keep it up.

This wasn't bad dude, it was an enjoyable read.
The opener was fire though, im not going to lie to you, haha.

this was dope man, short and sweet.... good vocabs,,, flowed was awsome.. and wordplay was there. nice piece man

Damn this was dope, but I'm kinda pissed that it's as short as it is. The imagery was sick, and well wrote throughout the whole piece. A sick minded fuck at times, but hey I liked it. The rhyme scheme was well put together, and definitely sparked it up with the multis. I see people on here daily trying to put shit together like this, and it just don't work out for them. This was on-point, and none-the-less proved how much skill you got. Thank you for the read, and hopefully i'll be able to read more shit from you soon...