City Child

Ghost
PRESENTS
City Child

http://www.streamsideorvis.com/images/school_child.jpg
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I had stopped, this night, at a corner where the traffic lights
flaunt their tricolour blooms in monotonous cycles.
I noticed the child as he stood, his bare feet clasping the
pavement, his short dressing gown revealing pale limbs
like the stems of sun-starved seedlings.
His face was sharp, honed perhaps by a knowledge of the
alleyways.
In a world of bitumen and towering glass,
he watched the hurrying crowd, unconscious of their buffeting,
and scanning faces anxiously; whom did he seek?
Sometimes he glanced upwards where the god Neon
embroidered the midnight sky with garish dogmas.
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http://www.historyplace.com/unitedst...bor/pierce.jpg
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How I wish that child the tenderness of grass beneath his feet,
soft foliage to brush his hands.
But most I wished him a blossom tree
to cast confetti petals on his sad scarecrow hair.
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http://www.andrewstern.net/gallery2/...ngry-child.jpg
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The lights changed. The cars behind me registered impatience.
Guilty in my warm comfort I pressed the accelerator,
knowing I would be haunted by the small figure
remaining in the petrol fumes of his concrete chasm where the
warehouses reared like sandstone cliffs in a dark forest of
factories.

I loved it, you will to.

You act like this is yuor best work.
Ima feed later.

Well it is, Onslaught even said so.

And for the younger, small minded readers that claim to be good writers. If you do not understand the words I used in this piece then hit up a dictionary or pay CLOSER attention in school.

Hmm..This is very different for me to read since I tend to stick to the O.M. side of things. But your vocab was really on point and wasnt too dull, and it didnt come off as you trying to use too big of words to fit into small lines. Everything seemed to fall together and just fit in nicely. And the pictures just added that much more emotion to your piece, which was a good thing. Other than that, I really dont know what else to say cause this is the first time I read anything in here and left feed.

word. Well let me see. on the real. i actually like this. Real open minded track. i'd have to smoke a nice blunt in order for me to write about this kind of stuff. LOL. The imagery is real nice in this one. Overall i haven't really seen any of your other work so i can't tell you if this was your best peice, but what i can tell you is that this is really good.

RTF and drop a vote in this battle ;)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ce-345727.html

Thanks guys.

Wow @ 17 views and only 2 people feedin. Favors returned and waiting for more.

Up and over.

yes it was good..now the way your making it sound you think its HOF worthy but i disagree. i may be wrong and it may be your best piece but im not familiar with your work. anyways. The vocab like others said wasnt to tuff for the less smart Rbers yet not to simplistic hich is good. Imagry was a strong point and the pics boosted it up. The emotion however i felt lacked a little bit but overall it was a good piece..short feed you know me rofl

You are familiar with my work :bored: lol. We were tag team partners in WIM. We are former VI bretheren. thankyou for the feed.