Death of You.

I'm Sorry,

I walk into your house like a prince of darkness
A part of this hurts my chest, maybe because I'm heartless
I didnt want to start this, you brought this upon yourself
It's bad for your health. No one can help as you welp in hell
I lunge you into your fire barred cell, enjoy your new life
Open your fucking eyes and be surprised, those voices were lies
Only I know the truth about your life, but first; let's hear from you
Do you remember the day that you're father bothered to dawn the oceans blue?
I hope you do, he lived his last day trying to please you bitch
You'r family was never rich, so why did you leave them in that ditch
The heat killed them, yes; I'm the man that killed them. Oh and ..
.. I killed you too, Welcome to my world cute. You fucking fool.

Eat shit bitch.

I wrote your diary because you were blind
Rewind time and I was the man that was right
Every fucking night, I put up with your shit
I admit, I only did it because I loved you. Bitch!
Now you can see? What the fuck, it's impossible
Your sarcasm and rude remarks are unstoppible
Damn, you dont care that I helped and raised you, fine!
Next time you lose sight, eat your own vagina, Dyke!
I'm fucking done with you. Now I put you back in hell
While every one you "Loved" celebrates wealth and well

I'm Done With You.

I stole your virginity, yet you walk away from me?
Not that easy, maybe next time you wont fail to see.
That I'm your ex boyfriend, they call me the devel
Fuck you bitch, because in my house. Their are no rebels!
Your under my level, so take a breath and start moaning
While I rape your ass untill it's fucking swollen
Your life sucks, oh trust me; I already know
It's the exact way every whore should go.

Damn, your expenisive.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327168
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321694

2 links. Now fucking feed!

It does contain Parental Advisory so little children that dont know anything about topical, dont read.

12 Fews yet no feed? WTF!

Bell....please stop writing!

wow, at stuff getting slept on in open mic since i've been gone.

One word, twisted. This was like a peep into the head of a serial rapist or something like that. The imagery was fucked up whenever i caught it. The vocab and rhymne scheme was straightforward, but the topic made it an intriging piece to read. Its the mark of a good topical head to be able to bring original concepts to a written piece.

Keep on posting.

p.s. could you please read my newest piece: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328536 , you aren't the only guy getting slept on here.

Thanks J6F. And wow at someone telling me to stop writing. What a dick. I'll write when ever I want thankyou very much you fucking ass hole. Someone apperently liked it. I'lll hit up the link A.S.A.P

Your a sick muther fucker....but dope

I thought your flow was the best aspect of the drop, your multis were nice but the flow is what made it a nice read...twisted but nice. The killer boyfriend thing is old but I think You did it in your own style so it's overlookable, nothing is really original. Good piece though It was enjoyable. That it definatly was.

Hit up my OM's

One

Thanks and up.

Lmfao -- wow... Twizted dude

Shit wuz like a cerial killer and rapist blended into one.... Like some eminem shit man'' -------- ya multis were koo and your flow was decent.... Could be worked on with your wording - sumtimes the rhymin seems forced and takes away from the piece---- Creativeness was ok and kinda basic......Ya stayed on topic and this was a neat piece to read--- Just work on your wordin and vocab and be a lil more creative with this piece and it would be dope
7.5/10

nce shit - rtf links in sig

This was a good drop..Not a bad flow and the multis were there..Decent mettas in there as well..The flow was okay during the beginning..But overall this was a good drop..Keep it up.

this iight but you know what...........


IM DA BETS ON RAPBATTLES.COM

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this iight but you know what...........


IM DA BETS ON RAPBATTLES.COM

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Wow at shitty feedback with a corny self-glory line. Leave.

Thankyou guys and ups.

Ok Bell, this was much better than usually what you drop to be honest. Another kind've emo piece, but better than usualy like I said. The one thing you lack is strong word choice, vocab, the wording is just elementary. You really have elvated thjough, as have I, but this was a nice little piece you have here. Overall a cool drop from you.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...wpost&t=329089

ok.