He was always there for me

I have not lived a perfect life and it has not always been easy for me and though I never went to God, he was always there for me. I struggled for a very long time until my soul became weak, still I never went to God but he was always there for me. I put up some good fights but somehow I still got beat, but i never went to God though he was always there for me. I tried to hide my bad feelings about myself so that others could’nt see because I never went to God but he was always there for me. I came to my last dime and ran out of money, but yet and still i never went to God though he was always there for me. I became very sick and very hungry, but i never went to God though he was still there for me. My family and friends abandoned me and i became lonely, though i never went to God, he was still there for me. So i got down on my knees and confessed my sins and I asked God to heal me, I went to God and he blessed me. I praised his name and started to believe, I went to God and again he blessed me. I had money in my pockets and food to eat, i went to God and he looked out for me. i was reunited with my family and friends and was no more lonely because i went to God and he was there for me. To everyone in the world, please don't be like me, though he is there for everyone, the only time he will come is once you confess and believe.

a dope message,gotta give props 4 dis,but as far as skill involved,waznt all der,simple form throughout dis piece,da flow gotta lil choppy,but still showed depth,nice drop,stay uppin,1

p.s.
return da favor pimp~juice,drop sum thoguths on 1 of my pieces,1

aight fuck this whole shit about having a good message.....
skills are the most important.....and NONE WERE SHOWN here....
no props for ya ass goin to sunday church school and coming back and writting about it.....

work on it alot...kid


Peace.....
1.............



Ps:.....stick to readin the bible....cuz writting lyrics aint ya best doing....

YA I GOTTA AGREE WIT DAT NIGGA RAWDEADLY HOMIE DAT NEED NUFF WORK IV HEARD MORE METAPHORE AND RHYME SCHEMS FRUM SMILEZ AND SOUTH STAR DAT WUZ JUNK HOMIE!
BUT GOOD MESSAGE. WE NEED MO SHIT LIKE DAT!

A good message no doubt but ya gotta come better than dat. u probably might think niggaz hatin but skillz does carry u far in da rap game. It wuz overall aight fo da concept but u need to work on yo material. Good luck.

^^yeh i agree wit homez.It got a lil repititous,which iz prolly wut tripped folks off.Jus work on it sum more,itll b up to its potential.Stay ^
-Avi

do what most people told me, work on your flow and try putting it into bars... im not gonna make fun of you cause i know im most probably weakest of the weak... but work on it kid