The Hidden Shadow

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...42#post5532142
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...50#post5532150

The Hidden Shadow

Paranoid, I feel it..*sigh* the presence of another
I cant go to the corner store, without feeling Big Brother
I KNOW YOUR THERE!!!!
We all know how good your reputation in the public is
But lets take a moment and talk about your injustices
Seeing you killed the natives faster than you can say Red Wing
And we shouldn't even forget about that whole Slave thing
Not that you werent the only practicer, but the biggest
While your policies in 'Nam had as much leverage as a midget
Lets not even speak about Iraq, I was in a good mood today
But you guys write the books, so you can make it all go away
But look, I'm no where as dumb as this conspiracy is..
Hurricanes are not man-made, but their relief sure is..
The hurricane took out, a number of these "minority person"
For them hope never dried out.. it drowned beneath the surface
So I ask you a question, bro, tell me if news reporters got in..
Why did it take so long for the help from our FUCKING GOVERNMENT
You seem to be able to follow me where ever I go
Then I should have made you follow me to the home of cajun soul
It might have atleast made a difference, something couldve gone right
But you guys chose once again to be the shadow...
...turning the blind eye as the Devil and Katrina made love that night...


So dont put on that face, dont pretend to even mope
you shouldve done cpr, you should've revived all hope
instead, you turned your back as soon as the levee broke

And now you know how I feel about your government body
You better thank God, I didnt start talkin about the Illuminati

its like a jungle sometimes..

when ya gonna givesome feed to me
that new sean paul ish.

This piece was pretty dope, man, definitely. The flow on point... "The Hidden Shadow", and I liked the topic alot.... i'm sorry I can leave much of a feed, man, but im rushing.. I seriously stayed up all night watching movies with my girl, so im a bit tired now. Its three sixteen in the morning, ya know.... ill feed this tomorrow some more... -one- .... i thought id just drop a quick, so you know im not sleepin on it...

uppo

I even made it short for you guys this time lol... damn

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Originally Posted by Ruckus.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...42#post5532142
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...50#post5532150

The Hidden Shadow

Paranoid, I feel it..*sigh* the presence of another
I cant go to the corner store, without feeling Big Brother
I KNOW YOUR THERE!!!!
We all know how good your reputation in the public is
But lets take a moment and talk about your injustices
Seeing you killed the natives faster than you can say Red Wing
And we shouldn't even forget about that whole Slave thing
Not that you werent the only practicer, but the biggest
While your policies in 'Nam had as much leverage as a midget
Lets not even speak about Iraq, I was in a good mood today
But you guys write the books, so you can make it all go away
But look, I'm no where as dumb as this conspiracy is..
Hurricanes are not man-made, but their relief sure is..
The hurricane took out, a number of these "minority person"
For them hope never dried out.. it drowned beneath the surface
So I ask you a question, bro, tell me if news reporters got in..
Why did it take so long for the help from our FUCKING GOVERNMENT
You seem to be able to follow me where ever I go
Then I should have made you follow me to the home of cajun soul
It might have atleast made a difference, something couldve gone right
But you guys chose once again to be the shadow...
...turning the blind eye as the Devil and Katrina made love that night...


So dont put on that face, dont pretend to even mope
you shouldve done cpr, you should've revived all hope
instead, you turned your back as soon as the levee broke

And now you know how I feel about your government body
You better thank God, I didnt start talkin about the Illuminati

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Heh you reminded me of me in this poem, although i don't think I could be quite as capable as you were. This was really smart and it flowed really well

"But look, I'm no where as dumb as this conspiracy is..
Hurricanes are not man-made, but their relief sure is.."

I loved that line

your really really witty and clever which makes your work enjoyable
stay up you do really well

uppers

pretty dope peice

this peice was on point, its flow was consistent and it was a enjoyable read,vocab was nice and the creativity was ok overall - i'd give this 7.8/10 i enjoyed this peice

keep em' coming

leave feed on murder.

up..

not letting it die yet

I quite liked the concept of the topic i thought at times you kinda strayed off topic a little and sometimes keeping it simple and basic can work as well as being complex.. i'd like to see this completed, like fully, good work so far though, keep it up.

well this drop was pretty drop. your flow was consistant all the way through. and you used decent vocabulary.. the creativity was ok. overall i really enjoyed this. though at times you flowed off topic.. you ended bringing it back together again. so that worked out ok. id give this a 8.0/10.. keep the good work up, man..