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he greives for a week while his friends are kickin back
A beats all he needs and a pen fa chicken scratch
he free's all his greif to pretend he is in fact
in need of a reason, to blend his written rap
wit seeds of demon, a trend this is isn't that
it seems he's is need to contend wit bigger cats
a dream n it seems to present tha sickest tracks
but he's in a dream that prevents his given path
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326899
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327012
here's some feedback links... uppin
the only thing good about this was the flow....i liked the flow bcuz it was consistent and smooth but the lyrics were gay...nothin special really plus this drop was wayyy too short....elevate playa
well... thnkz I guess... I get absolutely no props on the fact that every line was one big multie and each line was the same amount of syllables while weak and strong syllables all matched as well, I'm pretty sure thats more than jus consistancy and good flow... and say what you want about the lyrics but that is some real talk from my winter break when I was back home by myself for 6 1/2 days... i wasn't just rhyming words dun... neway thnkz for at least feeding...
i liked the flow too.. i also liked your multis, you got some good ones.
seems like you wern't really doing anything special, just showing an example of multi's.. so no real criticism.
Very nice. nicely worded. :]