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they call me ankle breaker
cause i like ya sneaks yeah i
got to have em so i make u
so i make u bite the street
im the anoying nigga cause
i like to debate the beef i
wait pashionly for bicthes
that like to swallow the
skee i drop bombs on
ya street the street that
i got beef wit is right across
from me so it easy to sneak
i got bicthes all across the
globe so its easy to cheat
its real talk cause i wrote
dis truefully i anit muhammad
ali but i fly like a butterfly
and sting like a bee BITCH
Real talk this was wack as fuck, but I'm going to take the luxury of explaining why it's wack as fuck, your vocab is too simplistic and elementary and some ish just reall didn't make any sense at all like the first couple of lines, your rhyme scheme...well you didn't have one you imagery, emotion wasn't even present, so you need to elevate heavily in thoses area's, theres a place in help desk called tutorials where they'll help you with this kind of ish alright, peace.
Memento basically covered it... you have got to diversify yourself... and you can't put a title like "Real Talk" on somethin this simplistic... what's REAL can't be defined with 5 to 7 word lines and basic vocabulary... stay up and elevate...
If you could give the feedback luv... it would be much appreciated...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326783 good lookin once again...