..A Topical About Text..ft. Baron P.
Baron P.
Ideas were Relli lost to Yung Ghosts via Chaotic minds
Left behind wins to achieve Tryumph that was really mine
Jookz was an old associate with Spul assisting the frontline
Giving nefarious Gestures I represent a 3rd world on grind
In the topical line, so we constructed free verse collaborations
Rhymes that meant nothing but escapism from congregations
Preaching hate mixed with distrust leaving Lymph Notes, a sign
Do you see that as I see it, a handful of sand encoding these mimes
So I left Feed~Back to track whether it returns I leased that
line you see, in verses about misery, they flipped it congrats
You bit a line, I won’t say who it was this time…see hey
I bop my head to words said-by the DJ, Forum at bay
Spitting lyrical pellets at mullet headed hicks all day
Lastly, matters grave the Grim Reaper is back again
The process was penned as was this never-ending end
Relli
I'm a Warrior, but not from Golden State like Baron D.
Da new topical on R.B., is how N.A. snatched up Baron P.
It's Mor-tu-us than u think, I'm da mind behind da stint
No extra measures went, however, here's a little hint
This will be a collab that'll be recognized 4 the ages
Baron set da topical foundation 2 da book...............
.........................and then I text to fill in da pages
I'm jus beginning, so my skills got 2 go more further
We killin'em already, so now they be like O-Merta-(Oh, Murder)
Neva seen this b4, now they steady asking for more
I'm a Lyrical Threat, n ..An Honorable Assassin...To The Core.
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This was a nice lil collab..I like how you'll incorporated all the members names in it...pretty cool...this was a more freespit..type of topical...as where the rhymes were the strongest point of the piece as a overall...but it was dope though...
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Thanks, uppin for more feed...
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To be quite honest this was really basic and had no purpose. It told no story. Now im all for verses upping yourself but only if the technical aspects are up to par (flow, rhyme scheme, multi's, metaphors) but i didnt see that in this piece. Sorry, but i really wasnt feeling it.
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Alright, this was akright, but all in all I really wasn't feeling it, I mean it's been done so many times, now that when you go about somthing like this you have to get more creative with the flow,imagery,concepts etc you guys on this one came pretty basic didn't really have to much to offer in this piece as far as reading it goes. Can you please hit up my links in my sig please.
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iight i cant leave "real feed" Cuase i kno both of you were not really tryin for HOF shit lol.
Yea it was good thoe, I think this would be ill as fuck on a mic for some reason.... yeah Im not gunna go off and say it was whack, had no purpose ect ect, Cuzzz ikno what u were tryin to do. Good flow, creativity was nice. good read, Stay upp
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i didnt really get the purpose in this either. i mean the rhyme scheme was great. and the wordplay was ok at best...but there was no feeling into the topic and sayin a bunch of rbs members names wasn't all that impressive to me.. it just made it a pointless read...on rb we keep Om's and text separate for a reason.
rtf
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326936
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