The Hidden Diaries: Malicious Breeds

Previous Entry…

“Cannibalistic needs caused by sinful greed’s
that come from demonic seeds, man heeds
his heart bleeds, Eternal ones mistake leads
to another King on another Throne
the diary concludes, time stills as stone”

New Entry…

The Hidden Diaries: Malicious Breeds

Lazarus gifted his soul to the child in the manger
buckling against bloody torrents, spreading danger
Tendrils slithered across, grappling gaping graves
Folly to be wise so folly to be kneeling slaves
Brave men fought for honor & cowards disdained
Satan digested brave men’s blood & cowards remained
The perilous priest entered, bible high over his head
leaving as a recycler, a mistress under his duvet spread
joined the devil in bed, minor adjustments were dictated
Satan stated, aggravated pagan premonitions & gravitated
towards ills he had cooled, deep frozen blood pooled
Priest fooled, he became an ingredients of ritualistic food
Illuminated night shadows; only reveal darker secrets
Like the cannibal dining on Hannibal, see’s guts
Secreting discreet words, he was slain in the willows
Leaving his lover solemn, rearranging cold pillows
Dining on heartily matter, the brain brings food for thought
Each strand solidified, sadly he was hunted & caught
Satan’s solo band picks the intestines & carefully strums
So where is the former king, deep in the caved doldrums

Flash after flash the devil relaxes on his coup
Four women, beaten by husband’s wrongly duped
He loved mind games, so he influenced their ways
Plays made with subtle tributes created with mock array
Flocked arise & locked demise, his will commands
Demands, incinerating rebel stands, a loser’s stance
Applied by ex-clerics, loyal priests simmer too
Like the burning wax running out, causing subdue
Satan has past the rejoicing stage, now strategizing
The words, categorizing he hurled us organizing
Us into labels, a reductionist method applied thoroughly
Left as lab rats, running in due course against originality
World was created by one & another concluded in totality
So both leave us at our own device, Satan rests his case
A place such as the human mind, always corrupts in haste
So we were given free will and holy testaments as well
To get the best of us, he left us to create & rule our own hell

Malicious breeds created by demonic seeds
formed by cannibalistic needs & sinful deeds
Left aggrieved, we choose who we please
Life’s a drama, the actors replaceable, the leads
Played by 2 ethereal entities, disgusted at us
Evils spreads too easy & good is put in distrust

Diary entries written by Stan Amans & Sam G. Don

| Satans Man & Gods Man

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...05#post5475005
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...34#post5475034

Last bump for this particular day.^

this my friend was nice. you held your bargain in curiosity nah mean homie you had a nice consistant emotion and flopw of things you never really fell off and nor did you ever lose control of the verse.. your transaction from stanza to stanza was on point man and you did a good job in it man like you always do bruh.. i missed reading your shit for it was depth in emotion and the vocab you usually use with a storyline is always on point and assorted effortly nah mean homie.. i liked how you spreaded the sotry out with a chronolgy touch man and the manger idea and lazarus aswell with satan nah mean it was dope and the topic makes it original itself man nice drop bruh

keep writing my dude and in the future we shall collab again.
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intro to love; pain is that good

nice. the imagery was well developed in your explaination of the scenery.
the emotional style was very dark and had a powerful vibe. this entry dealing of sacrifital tributes and deep seeded satanic rituals.. crazy shit man. i think you could have gotten into more biblical matters in this and twist it with a few more multis, and it left me wanting more about the backrounds which just means you did a good job gettin in my head with the storyline. the flow could have used just a bit more consistency of the rhyme skeme, no hate but some of it had a strain. nothing above average compared the exert you included from your previous entry.. that shit was fuckin dope, u should edit the link to the first one.

Thanks both...and theres three other pieces before this one so i just used a lil bit from my last one na mean.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=323948
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here is the link bruh

Yup links comments returned, up^.

very descriptive , imagery wise , close to photo finnish
worded well , .. and flow was on point most of its run
tho i would like a more multies in it to pick up the pace
and the rhyme scheme, wont hurt if you up too!
this was more story telling OM w/ a slower ish for pace ,
like u was reading it to me.....

Topic wise, was nice, setting was in place, and it went
w/ cutting off, and it did not feel like you were jumping from too
as majority of long pieces.... you thought it off well ,did not rush
and retained the flow u had to start w/ (still could be bit faster)

overall . i like it...
story wise, and how it was all laid down to one piece ..
only real thing to comment on . more multies and a sicker rhyme schme!
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=325329
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Yup returned.

Last bump of the day.

not bad at all..imagery and emotion was definitely there..you started talking about deep shit from the beginning which hooked me right away.. nothing bad to say except vocab and rhyme scheme were inconsistent..sometimes it was there like crazy and sometimes it was just average or worse... 9/10

check my political verse.

Yeah i get what ya mean na mean

Checked ya piece...^.