Gangsta

this song was dedicated to all those heads you see with a bandana talkin guns and murder that don't know the half of what they are sayin...it was wrote to a beat and it'll be on audio soon


so you're a gangsta now....i aint a gangsta, aint my life-style...
i been there though...seen how shit goes down
.....you think you got the heart....

GANGSTA....
(hook)
You got the mind of a rebel, Stay in line with the metal
An ingridient of evil, you lye in the kettle
Part of this system designed by the devil
Fuck the world because ya mind isn't level
One life homie there aint a second trip
You think your souls ready, are you definate
Nomore beliefs, no priest no confessin shit
Life of gangsta, you dont know depth of it


(verse 1)
you ruff riden, homiciden deciden who the next slug'll slide in
you don't fear dien a fierce lion, come on gangsta do i hear cryin?
i aint even striken with lightin, it's only thunder now
let's walts around the kitchen of the underground
you boast ya caken and if a posers haten you got a toasta waitin
so lemme show ya faces a glimpse of hell, and the host is satan
you aint shit but a show, backstage is where the phantom lyes
a man who's wise don't brag of his mags, cuz then his covers vandalized
daily ya skulls gettin split the minute you fall in the pit
fallen angels are callin for dibs, a thousand blades all in ya ribs
gamble with hell and get ya cards mangeled, yea every bars strangled

(hook)

(verse 2)
since 1st grade you put'em in a swirley state
life plan laid, you say fuck saint peter and the perly gates
no need for details, became a druglord from coca leave sales
burner sparkin, you so cold hearted but noone can freeze hell
my message is sick, witness the presence of it the lesson is this,
don't say you gangsta unless you ready to get ya testicales ripped
i spit gore, hip hop revival, this form i spit ill like lip sores
venomus, weaponless, as real as rippin intestants wit pitch forks
that's why we laugh at ya geeks, and come with massacre speech
you fake viben, only time you riden is in passanger seats
you aint graspin the streets, real gangstas bring havoc for keeps
no mortal man can clash wit the beast

(hook)

(verse 3)
you wunna be convict out and rep a cell block
death row call it hell watch, cuz you kept ba-rellz cocked
life aint easy, but evil here is only the surfaces realm
a murderers tale, would be jail then the 3rd circle of hell
use to be calm as a bitch now you jeffery dahlmer-n- shit
if you dont get ya dues then afterlife is where karma is flipped
demons haunted my scripts now they're gone in the mist
you're teamin wit demons? stupid ass you're the reason condoms exist
fuck guns man, i'll collapse your face with one hand
follow the light, closest you been to dark is a sun tan
every second a demons tearin ya flesh
so GANGSTA you wanna see where the evil spirit is kept?

(hook 2x)

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324419

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post5460667

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that shiit is fire ma nikka yo hit me up on a private messege so we could collab son

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YOU FAGGOTS DISSAPOINT ME, RIDE SOME OTHER NIGGERS DICK... THERES A KEYWORD TO THIS REPLY

GET A FUCKIN GRIP, GET SOME BALLS AND A COUPLE RESPONSES CAUSE ALL OF YOUR SHIT IS NOT WORTH MY REPLY SO BAN ME SO I CAN FEEL JUSTIFIED SOMEONE ACTUALLY READ MY SHIT.....


THANKS YOU STUPID BASTARDS.....


now hopefully some innocent illiterate black soul will respond... oh wait i wont get banned niggers cant read....

best part about this thread 20 niggers are gonna respond with absolute hate and then im gonna wonder how they had the money to afford the internet unless your little black asses go to the library everyday.... oh wait stop you cant read why you be in the library.

peace...

not at all racist....
is there a reason i cant get away with this if chapelle can i should be able to....

so....why did my thread get dudes crazy message?

Umm...

I read this and this topic has been done TONS of times, and for the most part, it doesn't apply to the Open Mic section on this site...

1. No need for a hook, son. This is TEXT...

2. This was full of mispelled words and terrible grammar...LoL...

3. It was boring...Yea you were talking about people "Frontin'" but, we have all seen this ish before, and this one held no substance...It was simple, but didn't cover anything new, no creativity, and it wasn't original...Also, Some of the multis seemed forced and took away from the fluency of the piece...

This seemed more like you wrote it for audio...And IMO Audio lyrics, and Open Mic pieces are 2 totally different things...Text you can incorporate so much more detail and bring such a creative scheme and all...But you failed in both of those categories...

Overall...A below average piece...Read around and work on your ish...

Keep up...

ok. not to be mean but hte guy up there that said this was fire.. NO this has alot of problems in it. there was no vocab,good multis just some horrible attempted ones. this was not anything like a topical. first off. topicals are more like poetry not how hood you are. they are usually "stories" told to make people understand, feel for, or have some kinda affect on them. not the gangsta shit. this is more of a educational write. with internal rhyming, metas, multis, rhymeskeme, and other types of shit used in the poeem type stuff look at other peoples Oms or the SS battles and take tips off them. ull get it one day ur just far from it...

RTF.

aight look...this wasnt wrote for TEXT this was written as an AUDIO to a BEAT....this wasnt meant to be a complete topical cuiz at the same time i had to make it catchy....i fully unbderstand what a topical is and i have never been a full topical rapper...i do aim at topics but i have more of a battle style....but Ink Edibal like I said man this was written to beat for an audio if i jsut sat and wrote this to release stress on sumthin there would've been a lot more detail and as far as grammar goes....when you hear a song....do you say "he did pronounce that R the correct way".....feel me?...i mean grim i read some of your shit, you're nice...but you have a straight out topical/poetry style which is not me feel me....i understand it's mopre vivid and has more of a feel to it but AUDIO can be the same only it takes some away because you're fitting with the beat....but yea guys props on the feed i appreciate people actually looking at my work and not just sayin its fire or HARD ya mean

I liked it, even thought it was played, I was feeling it.

I have no idea why, but I just was. That's all I have to say really, next time try an be more original

With a better structure, this could of been a decent piece. To those saying it doesn't need hooks in text, why not? They split the piece up pretty well, I've used them & I will again. I think what people should say is there's no need for the use of the titles of what you've wrote, such as [hook] [Verse 1] etc, as it is text we can see what those are, & we dont need to be told about them.

It was a decent piece, but as you said it was wrote for audio, Im just trying to help you out if you want to drop Open Mic's here in the future,


Good Luck, Mr. Christopher Goggins.
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