So See... Baron P. Mortuus/Tryumph

So See

Try U MPH
Baron

White queens used to guide me
Brown Kings abused to spite me
Black bars of gold burnt wildly
and platinum bounds held tightly
saw pictures of a federate being
seeing emotion neglected freeing
Teaching oceans of miscreant leering
and clapping at a wonderful stealing
so see the filigree, dangling easily
Busily dictating a narrative feasibility

So See….

Y’all felt the truth enter your hearts before, smoothly
and let it waste inside leaving your ventricles bruising
pick and choosing which comment to toss after the fact
switch from losing cause the person couldn’t handle your act
I’ve lied down with wolves whose bloody snouts have soaked me
And made bets with vets who at first wouldn’t approach me
I let the roach free, my burnt fingertips sting calloused
nerves sent numbs feelings into a brain which reeks havoc
I’ve had it up to here with cowards screaming a soldiers anthem
Plant them in a demonstration of thugs throwing their tantrums
Y’all been crammed in this nutshell for so long ya suffocating
Imma breath of fresh air, yet the dim-witted just keep fading.
Consider it blasphemy the way you act to me, you seem like sheep
Follow the leader of the pact you act like your asleep Geek.


So See….

I smashed- a glass house…Blast a gashed blouse
Louse pounced at the sight of bloody flesh ounce
Pronounce steeper, in tones with respect deeper
than a dead man-Deep sleeper- Reaper’s soul keeper
Shit…mean mug meaning to redeem his slug….
Shot- nearly dead but-he used up his anti-death drug
Call it a pain killer...Slick void filler-endangering iller --
Intensions—created by idle brains gaining pensions
Me better mention—tensions only lead to apprehensions
A 4th dimension of attention given to acts of miller
Beeping alarm, larger bill-uh..So beat the discreet
and leap at a chance to keep or fall at a stars feet
Nevertheless life’s a bless why lose it to stress--Yup
Cause who knows?--Maybe hell is all booked ---UP.

So See

White queens used to guide me
Brown Kings abused to spite me
Black bars of gold burnt wildly
and platinum bounds held tightly
saw pictures of a federate being
seeing emotion neglected freeing
Teaching oceans of miscreant leering
and clapping at a wonderful stealing
so see the filigree, dangling easily
Busily dictating a narrative feasibility






http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321868
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321788


will RTF... one..

nice drop freal....


Try ya came with some pretty nice shyt freal, good wordplay issued and you alot of emotion in ya piece for it bein a strait spit. nice flow as well very well worded and very well delivered. Descent use of creativity ight vocab usage. nice spit

Baron
ya had a excellent flow, great use of voacb , very well delivered, creative lines and tons of multies. Good use of emotion n ya piece. hella wordplay that had me totally amazed.

good drop from both freal

keep up the good work to both

I don't know who did what, but this part was my favorite...


White queens used to guide me
Brown Kings abused to spite me
Black bars of gold burnt wildly
and platinum bounds held tightly
saw pictures of a federate being
seeing emotion neglected freeing
Teaching oceans of miscreant leering
and clapping at a wonderful stealing
so see the filigree, dangling easily
Busily dictating a narrative feasibility

Yup thanks.^.

Bump.

i'm sure i saw this before in the week. thought i had replied to it........

nice opening went straight into the imagery and held a tight metre.....
nice format.../structure rolled well....... multies was popalopin off .....


concept was nicely dealt with. i doubt very much that hell is booked up. plenty of room left for the multitudes heading that way.ha....
much dope poetical display


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Yea flow was sick guys really... Wasnt as complex as BArons pieces usally are, witch i actully liked. yeah shit feed just in a rush srry this deserves better lol.

whatz da deal