Pain of guilt

Everyday I look in those eyes-of-yours, even when times-are-soar, I see what's beyond-those-eyes
All her life she had to respond-to-lies as big as a dinosaur, she feels like she'll fly-no-more, got her saying nows the best-time-to-die

It hurts to see my baby go thru-all-this and when you upset I cant even give you-a-kiss
Even when you happy inside you're blue-and-pissed, wish I could make-you-happy and take-apathy, never leavin cuz I'm glue-that-sticks

But what hurts the most is I'm the cause-of-ya-pain, when we walk in the halls-its-insane
you dont wanna talk to me and just-keep-walkin, but have a lust-for-stalkin you and neva leave ya alone, askin whats wrong but we all-not-the-same

How could I do such a tihng to you-in-the-past unfair like jews-gettin-lashed, I hurt the innocent fragile girl I'm tryin-to-protect
She's dyin,-mentally-wrecked cryin-not-knowin-whats-next,

Its all my fault, I put her in a world-of-despair, I hurled-her-in-there, and I just ask, why-did-I-do-it
I only cried-when-I-knew-shit, when I understood the events goin on, but now I just cry everyday outta the fact that ur hurt, on top of it you tell lies-that-added-to-hits

You avoid me pretendin nothings wrong when-its-obvious, like I'm then-oblivious, like I'm only in this-to-use
Everyday I hate myself for what-I've-done, for when I cut-my-hun, I'll release my problems when I cup-some-rum, what I still have left with you is a risk-to-loose

You didnt deserve none-of-that-shit, just an innocent young girl lookin-for-love on the lookout even when ya puttin-on-gloves, then I come along and give you some-large-fat-hits
Hits of pain, hits of betrayal, and to think you were happy-inside now life is a crappy-ass-ride, and its all becuase-of-me

Deep down inside when you workin hard, not b/c you studyin, cuz you coverin up depression, it would be snappy-to-die, did you ever see-love-from-thee
The memories echos thru-my-systems I wanna take it out on someone so I choose-my-victims, there might be a day my morals would be lose-and-I-hit-them

Even tho we sorta worked things out I still feel like it was yesterday, it may look like I'm concentrating on the test-today, but I'm worrying bout my guilt and booze-til-its-ten
PLain and simple I hate myself b/c of what I did-back-then I was stupid like a kid-thats-ten, like a farmer that bids-his-hens

I wish I could go back-to-the-past to snap-all-my-acts, prevented this shit from startin, just glad you didnt get rid-of-ya-friends
I have no idea how we worked-things-out now things go to normal as you come to school with a shirt-and-blouse

I still cant believe I hurt-my-spouse, ever since then I've been-faithful, but I know you dont beleive that even with the evidence I provide, and you see an evil emptyness in me like hidden-space-holes, but I wanna let you know, I'd go if one of us were-to-douse

I've scarred-you-for-life and for that I physically marred-myself-twice, I still worry for you, are-you-alright?
You might think I dont love you, and this guilt is coming from nowhere, the stars-are-in-sight, I wish we could watch em together, or maybe its me about to be run over by a car-with-big-lights

I dont know what-you-beleive but its not helpin with the cuts-I-receieve but for now we just go on livin life together tryin to rebuild-from-the-past
EVeryday I thank god we're still-together and that we'll-never be apart for now, the only reason I see-will-to-live-at-last

Thats what I see in your eyes...everyday
When we hug
When we talk
When we kiss
When we study together
When we're at your house
It all goes thru my mind...all this shit

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One.. Its Long Homie.. Cut It To parts Next time..Your Not the Only Head Dropping Posts For others To Read.. Eyes Hurt After Awhile Homie..(True?)

Two.. Not Bad.. but Not real On Point..Multies Like Crazy..(TO FUCKING MANY)..And 80% of Them Didnt Rhyme..(Critique Homie)..Thing About Multies.. is Its A collab On Words that Sound Rhymed Together..

Three..It Was Like Oh okay He gots a Nice Follow Going.. but then It Got Choppy.. Got Okay.. then Hit Choppy Again..So thats Another good Reason to Cut It up Into Sections.. Makes It So you dont Get thrown Off Also..Of course Unless This Was Pre Wrote then Fuck It Do what You Like..lol..not Bad.. but not Great.. continue Dropping though..

uppity up up

Thanks for feed

bruh
the multies and rhymes in this were sick
i bet it would real good with audio
toward the ends though you got kinda sloppy and the line were way stretched

Everyday I look in those eyes-of-yours, even when times-are-soar, I see what's beyond-those-eyes

this was the dopest part and it was the 1st line
write everyline with that mood and you'll have yourself an amazing read
stay up

yo sick peice... u came mad creative with tha multiple rimes.. it was flowin mad good .. but tha flow started 2 fall off towards tha end.. prob cuz u were thinkin how 2 wrap it up.. but overall sick peice