New dude on the board show me love i give whats gotten.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=289109

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=319211

i smash the scene bustin out the concrete//
bulk up like hulk ill snatch you off your damn feet//
im straight through the flesh,penetrate a vest//
have kevlar stressed, like a manic depressed//
the main suspect, tearin up ya set//
pull your heart through your neck, red beam on your chest//
read eye demon spittin breathin fryin flesh//
whos next,flee the scene, "NO-EVIDENCE"
Mark the target, let me see you cross the margin//
im larger than life release the eagle let it fly//
50 callibre stall-i-on,im a helluva face off//
break off your own hand, and tear your face off//
i pace on blood washed sidewalks, this aint no fuckin cakewalk//
and i aint no fuckin baker cookin tracers i spitraw//
hollow points rejoice when they get to pin you to the wall//
r-i-p naw dogg not me,im the largest pitbull a real purebreed//
aint no need to sleep, im about my fees//
got keep up, rats always tryna sneak that cheese//

stop sleepin, i dont sleep on yall.

Aight, Straght up Duval. It wassn't bad, but u lacked some more advanced wordplay and metaphors. it was a little basic, but had some potential. Just keep spittin and u'll get there dawg. -1- 4.75/10

not really what we see in the OM section this might be closed for violattion of the specific name Rule but imo i didn't like it

alright any feedback is good feedback. what do you mean by violation of name rules?