American Baby

American Baby
Like a Rose From Concrete

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Put me in the system beat me black and blue
So i can live just for music and die for it too
Killing myself so silent for hope of a new day
worlds fade to gray passing demonic parades

American Baby
Like a Rose From Concrete

Sorrowful smphonys song on the streets daily execution
into the abyss of darkness go our thoughts of revolution
to even out the playing field to we add to noise pullotion
still no resolution or diffusion in search of the conclusion

cops still bruising
they find it amusing
we can't win for losing

American Baby
Like A Rose From Concrete

The daily races going nowhere horses forced to comply
You can't defy nor deny with blinders opon your eyes
we're up for buy modern slaves born promise goes awry
those who rufuse to abide hide from the worldwide genicde

American Baby
Like A Rose From Concrete

Bury my microphone pen and paper to drive me away
tell the storys of the streets another day
Rip my spine out and sign my will in my own blood
torture brutalize anaganize me take it all away in one thud
So the tales of an american baby will last this last Flood

American Baby
Like A Rose From Concrete

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I loved your piece..it was nicely put together...it flowed well...it's content was well written and thought out....you covered the topic well and the structure was good really grabbed my eye...the multi's were consistant.I see that you're elevating nicely as well...I like how you incorporated music into it seeing that it's the become the driving force of American Society..

what th3e blah up

pretty cool... It was simple but I liked that about it... some of the multies could use better connector words to keep the rhythm from catching too many awkward long or short syllables, but good job mostly... I thought this was cool, using the tupac term as kind of a song chorus but more of a stanza divider.

Stay up this was pretty cool could just use a little more practice making sure the meter is on target... Also, focus a bit more instead of making this broad-type message, I know about what you're talking about and society's injustices, but what do you think about it? How does a character you might create in this situation cope with the ramifications?

Hit link in my sig to RTF when u got time. Thx

Having a post or two might not give you a good impression of respect from me, but I liked this. The topic is nice, and you sticked to it. The first and last stanzas (if you wanna call 'em that) are my favorite. Going in good and out good. Nice work.

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Originally Posted by DCPISFREE

Having a post or two might not give you a good impression of respect from me, but I liked this. The topic is nice, and you sticked to it. The first and last stanzas (if you wanna call 'em that) are my favorite. Going in good and out good. Nice work.

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lol i only got 16 posts on this account lol ups

hey ho's feed or else i will stab your mother in the eye with a fork i ate corn with and shit on her shallow grave

uppp

uppp do it in the butt

The best piece I've seen you make by far. Good imagery, GOOD picture, Good story line, good catching custom, just, good everything. The more poetic side of you. I wouldn't say it's AMAZING, but it sure as hell is good man. I really enjoyed the fact it reflected an american life in a poetic way, I have some other ideas that opposed yours but I won't get into it.

Good vocabulary and use of words. Nice man, keep it up.

Peace..

wtf this is probably my greatest piece i have done by myself besides The Road To Freedom and hos stay sleep thats gay as hell

you know what u guys suck nah just messin up

my last up stop sleeping