Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
Daydreamin … I fell asleep beneath the flowers
For a couple of hours
What a beautiful day…
It’s hard to come back to actual life after visualizing your dreams
I enjoy that sensational feeling of just belonging crazy as it may seem…
Jumping through fields of success and prolonged but finally achieved aspirations
Searching through my minds gallery for indication of some type of inspiration
Daydreamin … I fell asleep beneath the flowers
For a couple of hours
What a beautiful day…
This fantasy land a relief from the overbearing cynical world that hounds me
Oh what beautiful things surround and astound me but reality slowly sinks in around me
How good it feels to have every desire fulfilled though it’s unreal …
The thought of just ‘breathing’ sends a body to chills
Daydreamin … I fell asleep beneath the flowers
For a couple of hours
What a beautiful day…
Suddenly I’m broken from my daze and I return to this natural phase
Perilous reality shades my vague but lucid memory of daydreaming
It fades…
For a couple of hours
What a beautiful day…
Daydreamin
-Nena
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Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
upz and feed would be appreciated ...Out~
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
aye you need 2 links where you left quality feed, hit up my links and use thoose for your feed i'll rtf when i see feed left
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
wtf . nena
you need to do a better job at your creativity on making your drop's more hot. You were not talkin about nothing but being beneath a flower and getting sufficated by the petals.
Wordplay was ok but you and I both know you can do better than that . You also said feat. Lupe . I know him personally and I've never heard of you or seen you unless your going by another name on here. Spit true facts you will be respected more
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
this was ok pretty good i like how you blended ur own work with lupe's the structure was good the rhymes and all came in at the right place liked the topic reminds me of a peice i did but it's still fairly original the flow was great very smoth i liked it maybe put the refrains a little farther apart the vocab was as well very good and saw some nice words through out the peice so overall pretty decent peice stay up
leave feed on my om past present future
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
hmm..pretty good idea i guess..descent vocab and all that shit..but i didnt think the lines flowed well together to be honest..
"Jumping through fields of success and prolonged but finally achieved aspirations
Searching through my minds gallery for some type of inspiration"
especially like this..maybe try shortening it some..otherwise it wasnt too bad.
ive never seen anything else from you (didnt know you were still here) but id prolly give it maybe a 6/10 compared to everyone else's..read some dope ones like Aces new one tis' nice
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
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Originally Posted by Mic.Jordan
wtf . nena
you need to do a better job at your creativity on making your drop's more hot. You were not talkin about nothing but being beneath a flower and getting sufficated by the petals.
Wordplay was ok but you and I both know you can do better than that . You also said feat. Lupe . I know him personally and I've never heard of you or seen you unless your going by another name on here. Spit true facts you will be respected more
lmao obviously you dont know the entirety of ft.lupe... i used lines from his song daydreamin so therefore its featuring him... and im not talking about suffocation by flower petals... theres a deeper meaning... and to everyone elsethanks for the feed ...
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
tell me how u wan ittttttttttttttttttt
suppppppp nena my wifey lol o/j long time no type still.
feelin the drop
keep it hooooood gangstuhhhh bless ~1~
Re: Daydreamin' ft. Lupe Fiasco
yo, this joint was sir real. like, I felt what you was sayin bowt all the butiful things in life makin you feel whole and like 1 wit the earth ya dig. this is like a dali lama paneting.