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Damn...This is the best thing I've ever read from you. >_>'
The multies were sick, vocab. was on point. the internals were everywhere doin' their thing, the imagery was great and the flow had me movin' my head as I read through it. It was a lengthy read but well worth my time.
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He has maimed many men, plus a couple of chicks
Son was cold back then…
But since doing ten in the pen
…………….His whole perspective has switched…
Good opener, left me wanting to read on.
How he wished he’d just resisted that urge
Now ghosts haunt his spirit, he exists on the verge
Of a nervous splurge, as twisted faces - emerge
Whispering words worth a thousand pictures
Recalling each sinister-incident, he lies listless
Listens too the screams that invade daydreams
Cold sweat seeps thru seams & fades his genes,
First toted triggers as a teen angry & mean faced
Blood on the staircase, barely made clean escape
Pulse beating torridly… heart teemed with hate
Sown so sinfully, surely Satan schemed this fate
His plate is over laden with the flesh of rivals
Dining on death soup, regurgitating the next revival
^ All of that was off the chain, had to quote it.
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…Shit started after sex in a brothel,
A blowjob from a crack hoe ended in a flash of rifles
Lmao. Good ish.
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Dirty deeds fuck-up his head, as fathers face appears
Mother lays half-dead naked beside a case of beers
Another tear drops… & little brother tastes the fear
Raised in domestic chaos, sister had braids in her hair:
^ I liked this part and believe it was integral in this piece, it showed the emotion much.
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Miles from home, lost & zoned-out, drunk off the juice
Torsos in the trunk, pray for life? Punk what’s the use?
^ Nice.
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Stephanie the younger sister was stillborn…
Long gone, dun never met her, yet he still mourns
Until dawn - guns spill pawns, revenging ill wrongs
Relieving a piece of the grief, - he kills throngs
Smoke brings peace to the soul, so he fills bongs
^Once again, another part that I feel provided a much needed piece of emotion.
I was really feelin' this piece all the way through with the only slight thing I was 'meh' about was the ending which could've been better. Other than that, this was an ill drop man. Unlike alot of pieces, one thing didn't weigh out another, like, emotion > Wordplay or vice versca, everything seemingly went hand and hand. This piece,...Is well worth nomination. Keep up, and check on some of my future drops.
