A Hustlers Plot

In the Pharmacy~Absolutely my skills is infinitely polished
I understand yo cookin' skills' is undeveloped like Theoretical logic

Im a HUSTLA, shits ~critical when you struggle wit money foe College
My Habits are Coke Tatics I could change my name to Automated Deposit

The way my money flowin' like water and Fosits Im the Ring Blessed By the Lords of Scarlett
Raised on Chow line's in the Projects ,You some other thing chasin' a Dream you just a Hobit

I Serve Crack like seats in a Stadium My Dope is inflamous yours is Definitely Garbage
I leave em sick wit Vomit I got the Fiends Feelin' Famous they think my Rocks are Comets

The Money schemes Neva Stop Fake niggaz Livin' out Movie Themes be the First to Get Shot
Amongst other things this is a Hustla's plot A quick turnover on cream and avoid-in' the Drops

Yo Pockets lacking stamina Homie,you must be in need of some vitamin C (oke)
I roll threw Leather Jacket know chrome on Twenty Two's thats white a than D (ope)

Nigga Foot Ball is a Game of Inch's, Im Serving Base Balls trying to win the Penant
With Lawyer doe to keep me off them benchs, So Fuck a Public Defendant in the Eigth inn'in

In my Twilight im far from the Passion of Christ, but its the Passion of Life thrist and Hunger
Thats why I spend my Bible Study Nights outta the Church on Corners

Blowin' Dro mar-a-jauna goin' down On my A- list chick like im headed for TaJuwana
Wit Ten Stacks of Grocerry Product that All my A- list Fiends Honor like they Meetin' Wit Alah

Im on My Feet and Im real wit Cake,, I use to Run Balls State to State like Priest Holmes
Now My Fleet To eat we use Real Estate,, I BYE,, Sale,,, And Lease Holmes when the Price Deflate

The only good thing here was the rhyming, but other than that nothing. work on your structre because that is hard on the eyes lol, and dont space out your bars, work on your vocab shit's simple, and dont write about such stupid shit noone is gonna leave feed, and you need 2 links of good feed you have left on other peoples oms.

Ok.

To start off, it was an "ok" piece.
But u need to change ure structure. The first thing people notice about this, is prob. ure wack structure.
Werd to dj... The only good thing was ure rhyming.
But change ure structure, so people can read it better, and keep working.

agree'd wit them, this is an ok piece, u need to fix ur struc, put some emotion, a little imagery, and make it just a little more personal, u should have nailed this topic.

leave feed on my om = child soldier