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Beware
nov. 3rd-2007-3am-
rounds rain down from the heavens-
in a display of spectacular light-
from realms unknown,
symphonious responses scream from ur cellphone;
the day dont look bright no mo-
human interest stories on the tv screen show-
that the big 3 dont know-
or that monica kaufmann dont wanna know-
that which used to be water runs as blood from the kitchen sink-
was it a wise choice when u decided from which well you'd drink-
where's the aide-
everyother commercial on bet nowadays deals wit aids-
1 in every 4 black men on planet earth will succumb to aids-
1 child every 3 hrs will enter this world infected wit aids-
and the goverment aint sure-
if it could be called a disease so there's no allocations for a cure-
U vote but where's ur worth-
my frontyard is the gloomiest place on earth-
and Bush aint made no plans-
to set up reparations for the black man-
beware of outstretched hands-
When armaggeddon comes-
WHERE YOU GONE BE STANDING?
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umm it was mediocre u have some potential.. ur strucutre was a bit weird ur flow was alright..
u had some nice vocab but the concept kinda confused me..
everyother commercial on bet nowadays deals wit aids-
1 in every 4 black men on planet earth will succumb to aids-
1 child every 3 hrs will enter this world infected wit aids-
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i like the concept of facts and turth here but u could have switched it up a bnit is bland and just not really "i gotta keep reading"
keep it up n u'll elevate