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Pac-Man
Pac-Man
i gobble up pills, give young minds thrills
to live, a cherry along with the players skills
a prayer to the two bit pac
beating worlds i keep on track
level to level i level rebels
in each one a new creature dwells
a feature that sells... a video mascot
i move too intricatly to be caught
i might not be what the ladies saught
but ms pac mad keeps me thumping
she calls me her two bit dumpling
these foes im trumping...
pulling quick turns... i misdicrect
dont let these baddies intercept
i inject fruit... watch tables turn
its the way to suite, no concern
where i learned all this...
it is givin each time as a gift
when a kid lays his hands on the controls
i begin guessing how the end is foretold
my soul is sold to this box...
intoxicating as it is, night is constant detox
ive been threw alot...
subject to losing and being caught
bruising my coat... munching away
i wish one player would just stay
it gets lonely when you never know them
no regrets in this clever endevour
...however i am condemed
Pac man... the 1980's gem
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haha this was very simple yet i can tell the deeper meaning behind it....as funny as it is you gotta like the pac man concept ya know...it kept me reading but at the end i wasnt really diggin it as much...it lacked subtlety and that's what i put emphasis on along with emotion...overall it was very entertaining to read. it flowed well and you didnt use very big vocab...rtf and vote on my topical battle plzz...i would greatly appreciate it..thank you
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nice theme and good job sticking to it, gave me a laugh just guessing how you were going to rap about pac ma
a pretty solid piece in terms of the rhyme scheme- the one thing that i would have enjoyed was elongating some of the lines and slowing down the flow at some parts- some of ur lines were pretty short snippets- but its ok since that makes a good parallel to the game
enjoyable read
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yeah i liked the whole concept and strange IMAGERY is there/ on point .......
BAM now..shit is more than aite.... a bit shoirt but nevertheless concise./presise/ beyond advice/cool as ice/.2 bit dumpling was ha...lol......... a mo'fucka had some nice variation of rhymes in this shiot f'sho//typo type negro flow./.............whoa....../(i'm high as a kite)
your soull going into detox was interesting all the same. shit was only lame in its shortness
so illy type piece.and check out my fucking piece or JUST cease-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=315291
peace
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Very interesting, man...
I was looking at old shit and this caught my eye...being that I was alive and well and playing this game in the 80's, ya know.
Cool flow, tight comparison to real life...real struggles, rat race shit.
Even incorporated ya girl into it. That was cool too.
Level to level, I level rebels...
Nice. Reminds me of climbing a corporate ladder too...how they say you step on peeps on the way up.
Dunno if you mean to get that deep, but nice if ya did.
Peace
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I'd appreciate you not upping pieces older than 3 weeks.
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