Visions and dreams

There's a fine line between vision and dreams,
vision is seeing.......while a dream is believing,
believe me, one mans dream is another mans vision,
the only thing being, is that that man is seeing.
Stick with me here....
Imagine that, when your eyelids drop, the violence stops...........
Silence emerges as peace converges.....on every part of this sleeping person,
The reason being is that this dreams version.....
is a complete diversion of the real worlds version
And the nightmares lurkin when you lift that curtain...
sleep is interrupted and then your immersed in.....
battle's and attacks, actual facts,
remember seeing is vision, and your eyesites back,
and if I might add, that you can't strike back, your just a pawn for however this nightmare acts.
The truth is a vision, Martin luther had a vision, if it was a dream he wouldn'tve completed his mission.
Intuition is part of vision, makebelieve is for dreams...
Dreams are confusion, vision says what it means.

Just remember that theres a fine line between vision and dreams..

5 horseman
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...70#post5231170

dj.."As I"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313376

This is a pretty good drop, the lines that stood out to me the most...

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Imagine that, when your eyelids drop, the violence stops...........
Silence emerges as peace converges.....on every part of this sleeping person,

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The Vocab. was good, Imagery could have been better and flow was a bit confusing at first but picked up towards the end. It had a good feel, so overall I'd say this was a pretty good drop. Oh yeah, the structure was a little 'ew' here and there, but still, good job. Keep up.

Check 'The Two', when you get a chance.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313372

this drop was entirely true i was completely amazed in its entirety... this was absolutely amazing i was feeling your whole peice it totally grabbed my attention... in essence its all true... your vocab was ok... your story line was crazy...but overall i was really feeling this peice

This was a complete drop. The imagery was there the vocab was used well and the topic was cool too. Though structure could use a lot of help it'z content was nice. Overall this was a good read. Nice Shit Keep it ^

Damn Structure would've added to this piece. nice flow. multi's, imagery and consistancy through out. You played the topic good enough to impress me. Overall this was a good read ya rhymeN is kinda different yet not really it may have been the structure. ya vocab is nice nothing to be said about that. overall a good read. keep @ it famO.

haha you remind me a bit of Ledge in the way that you flow and have such a cassual narritive pressance about you. although, you're not quite there. i feel like this was TOO casual, like when you said "stick with me here." haha just so unneeded man, if we've started we'll proooooobally keep with it. aside from that though alot of this was very insightfull and i throughouly enjoyed reading it. i loved the fluency of both the rhyme scheme and the content. it made for an overall solid piece that kept moving. i liked this alot though, very breif, but for what it had i had very few complaints which is rair. i'll be curious to see how your writing developes within your next few pieces or whatever. keep writing.

if you would, Abstanti Collective's newest collab ...
"Anathema"

I liked this a lot, the vocab was good and overall it was a pretty decent piece. I would have liked it to be longer though, but to me that would be the only flaw. I think it had deep thought and meaning and every line was perfectly constructed to what you felt and what you wanted to portray. It was a good piece...keep up the good work :)

appreciate that....................................uppin more feedback

ok i saw your link in my collab thread, and i see that you have soooooooo potential... i thought you would SUCK cuz your name... but you could really get the hang of this fast... good multies, some slack in the flow in small places, but this was good for a first drop.. just try to make it a bit more complex. respect

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