Protest.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312918

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312909

[Verse 1]

Speak your words..let it insert
Into the ashes of the old earth
Let your words plant seeds
In Society's memory
Let the message control the scene
Nothing will ever be exempt against me
I'll speak out for love not for violence
My eyelids, shall not lie..I will never be silenced
I've got an opinion to stretch within minutes
Drawn from Within..I'll catch the rest of my mistakes
To prove a momentary validation forever great..
I'm gonna break through daylight with such will
Your illogical will is protested by my Logical skills
I'm away from the light..but intertwine inside
The fossils of truth, no lies accepted tonight.

[Chorus]

Don't let words penetrate whats left..
Let's go out and protest..get it off your chest,.
Dreams are crushed by hate and misery..
Focus on your life cherish it with sympathy..
Natural rights will not be sacrificed.
I just want to protest for whats RIGHT!

Repeat twice

[Verse 2]

Back when I was 7 and 9...
I focused my mind...
On the words of malcolm and Martin all the Time
They spoke out against violence..
Different visions...
But all with the same morality behind it
Gaining my trust, my attention for love is a must
A temple of disgust, my mind would rust..
Let gay marraige be accepted i might Cuss.
Truth be told...they desire what I don't want
I accept my fate, I accept my path
I don't accept your visions, feel my wrath
Let me choke out the president with truthful news
Not having me around, what would a lie do to you?
When I get hopeless I give the extra effort to stride
Never shall I try, in battle I'll fail but not die.
The truth is circled around my messages
So our Opinions will never seem Effortless

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 3]

Intense and emotional, life's devoted to use
any mindless statement to thoroughly open you
Into the realm of logic, liberal arts, and Success
Felicity can be taken either way.. hope for the best
Some people Slit their wrists, hopefully in their dreams
Not reality, believe me protest is not what it seems
Don't let my words provoke or entertain you..
I'd appreciate it if you let my logic persuade you..
Don't allow a person's visions to replicate yours
Or change it for less, persuading you to do more
Stick to your love and will, fight for what you believe
Crushed dreams will come to reality if they need...
I'm ready to callout to the world and deliver
The things I treasure could make me a sinner
Food for thought always, I know you love dinner
Now respect my visions because it lies at the epicenter.

[Chorus x4]

Fade.

this was alright...pretty good for a new kid...one thing though... never do hooks in text alot of people don't like it and they'll take you more as a newb for them...but other than that this was ok ... the first verse was the weakest you came real simple with vocab and bored me...strutre was off...didnt look like you took any time and made it look rushed...you kept the flow up though which i liked...second verse was better...had some decent sense of vocab still kinda simple...came with a better strutre and alot better flow along with that...third verse was the best no doubt..ou came real good with flow and stepped up you're vocab...came pretty good with strutre and it flowed real nice...keep up man..and check out my drops in my sig.

sleepers