Baron Vs elitefreestyler

Topic: Paper Chase
Line Limit: 16 lines max and min
Check: 5 minutes
Due: 25 minutes

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Paper Chase

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Snatched out of my hands buried in stones & sands
I search for Dead Sea scrolls chasing documents bland
Grand treaties of Versailles effectively handicapped
Germany dislodged from power, cowered yet intact
Prefix complete words make incomplete sentences
Entrenches of papers chased by lawyers under pretences
The poet searches for influence chasing his papyrus
I search for a nuance of green dollars and gold dust
Old must; make way for the new who know wushu
Haunts daunt the man who attends a cannibal’s stew
I glue collaged papers together, will I create another
Treaty or pass a law that’ll class women as whores
Doors closed by words stamped on papal herds
Words heard and mixed with metaphorical curds
Brother will kill brother, reader shudder…the lore
Still chasing that paper & with it a false manmade law


16. 22 minutes.

Title: Chasin' Paper

Nobody can hold me in the hustlin game
I gotta get money somehow everyday
To be a hustla you gotta save cant get rid of no change
Losin money hurt worst than feeling pain.
I'm a fiend for money I don't give no tips.
Some call it cheap I call it gettin rich.

I get songs off limewire put it in a cd.
put a fake cover, sell it for 3.50.
I used to freeze kool-aid and tell kids it's icees.
With the money from that, i bought me some nikes.
Tried a lemonade stand on my block one time.
Opened it at 8 o'clock the pitcher was stolen by 9.
Crackhead gave me coke told me to try it.
I sold it the next day, got my friend to buy it.
I don't spend i save, sunshine or rain.
I'm serious with money son this aint no game.

ONe sec you voted against me cause you knew what topicals were.........ah well G/L..#1

Ya #2

#3...............................................

okay dam baron i was reading you stuff and it was straight but in the begining it sounded like you were an treasure hunter then as it got deeper i can see that it was somthing totally diffrent the ending was a little predictable but it was enought to take the win.

elite what can i say that was bad but this is the first step towards elevation keep battling you'll get the hang of it,and try the tutorials in help desk for topicals it'll help you out big time famo.

v/baron for obvious reasons - both please hit up links in sig please and thank you.

hmm...pretty one sided...freestyler your verse was weak..it flowed alright...you stayed on topic...a very bad way to go on it though and wasnt very creative....Baron came very nice...the pic made it intesrting...the flow was nice....strutre was easy to read...and baron you had a good sense of vocab...v/baron

Thanks bump^ #4

This was pretty one sided for Baron P. easily won....ur's was well thought out formatted well and worded perfectly..

elite damn that was wack.....when doing topicals you have to dig deep and understand the true meaning of the topic at hand....Yet keep at it you'll get the hang of things after while (Hopefully)....

V = Baron P. for obvious reasons

sorry for the freepost didn't see the post limit

baron easily done out matched freestyler...what a waste.....baron had emotion and nice metaphors that comeplimented the sceen and image that was being portrayed and used....nicely done but this was really one sisded to baron cus freestyler just went freeflow typa style and didnt connect with any storyline what so ever.

Do I need to explain this? Guess I do...
Elite, that wasnt a topical, and even if it was, it was horrible. You had preschool lines, your flow was messed up, and your structure was awful. Elevate son, because that was bad.
Paka, This was really nice, your wordplay was excellent, much better than elite's. Your flow and structure were on point too. I'm not going to go into much detail, you just won.

Vote-Pakaveli.