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Do you Give a Fuck?
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Fuck the sentiments…
Love can swing on my nuts as I rush the elements
Imprints left grafted…
W/- Guerrilla tactics practiced to exactness
The Prince of Bastards
Armed w/ chapters unchained from the pits of blackness
Come, peep this vision…
Reap the repercussion, & then make a decision
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I see fractures & lesions
Legislators, actors, & directors deceiving
Young demons is still teething
Raised on spilt-milk GM crops & cheese skins
Baby moms expose G-strings
Sport sequins, & dress offspring by means of thieving
Pleading morn until evening
Inmates claim innocence; still no one believes them
So now, this beast is feasting
Feeding upon Mother Earths “eastern promise”,
Orchestrating famine, vanquishing the rainforest
As life’s core reservoir is gone to the dogs
Your congress of peace is popping its clogs
Priests’ happy Shopping for fleece Gods’,
It’s the law, there’s just no stopping these sods
I place my lenses on tripods
& laugh at losers who gamble in dire odds
Oddly enough, they become washed-up
Sadly - it’s rough, at-least sad for you pup
Remember I’m a beast, & never give a…!
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links-
1- http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306377
2- http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=307882
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Didn't mind the loose, freestyle manner of language use here, as it accentuated the raw tone of your message. Nice multis, obviously structuring and syntax could have been tighter but your use of imagery and language was strong throughout and communicated your message pretty well. Good work for the style you used.
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Nice, i liekd the sarcastic yet realistic look on parts of this. I honestly didn't recognise you first lol.....but yeah, overall, this had a different flow to some of your usual pieces but was still good and the storyline or should i say concept/message was much more evident till the end. I see the outlook that you took in this and as i said before i always like seeing religious or social tinged topics to read and yours usually is one of them. So yeah, overall this was good, i didn't pay much attention to the visual structre though it was aight but it could''ve been formed better not that it affected your flow much anyway. So yeah, Stay up^
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i liked this piece. From the start it had a freestyle feel to it, and that made this piece gd
The rhyming in this piece was also gd, and its complicity (complicatedness?) wrks well with th piece cus usually freestyles r more simple
The flow in this piece was gd, but it changed from th first section to the second section, which was the only fault i found.
I liked this piece n id like 2 c more off u...but i c uv bin bannd?
if u jus put ur user title to 'banned' stay up!
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WTF, why's Vortex been banned..........:/