follow me M-A-D

my morals went with my mouth
inhibishionbs spent impregnating my spouse>>>>'s firend
conscience lent to my firends sister for a blood blister
on> a> date with twister ( pause inbetween each word)

swallowing lister----- rean
living off of glycine as green as im seen
meaner then the machine your seeing...
peaing, on the wall then turning back off it
smearing lip stick with a dip stick cas of a lack of it
enfusiastic, spastic, snaping back like an elastic
getting my ass kicked, thinking im mr fantastic,
made out of plastic,
figurines, slicing you faster then wilverwean ,
bust at the seams, ready to steam, like a cooked bean,
sniffing mr shean, why dose ever-re-thing look. so. clean?
floating like,... he, le, em,
we, al, ing,.. in my ass, back from a fight at class over an assessiment task
smashed a glass beeker me my self am meaker picking on the weaker
cheater green slime coke lime rhyme about the time you stole a dime back when it was a crime
repersent the present ass cooked like a phesent
to hell im sent, but the it sent me back, just for fun wack-a-sack
for fuck-ing-up a de-mon-ic pa-per run
smell the seant of smoke an rum
crooked an bent, over like ron dover fuck you, you shofer
I stand out like a gofer, whearing a pair of loafers, an a hat thats topped,
poped and droped out my mom like a toaster
per-matuer-a-ly deformed and cripled physicalty as well as per-son-aliatly
reality is hell to me
raised by television A, B, C,
to believe that we
would become welthly, and famous
the next generation of aimless teenages on low wagers
read the yellow pages at six stages
bellowe your rages
locked in societys cages....

(slow....) (fast....................)
follow me, I will pro vide a purpose
stop talking, your lies are worthless
theres no way, they can usurp this
(fast.........................................) (slow....)
dont pull, the clover over our eyes,it all lies!, screw you,
(fast..................)
we all ready learnt this
if you wern't pissed before you are now for shure going door to door
waging a personal war at caranigicy hall haha

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inhibishionbs, wilverwean

you need to work on your spelling that phonetic shits okay for babies but your 17, proof read your verses before you post them, use a spell check or something.

i liked your flow, i thought it showed potential in some places...... BUT!!!

what the fuck were you going on about, some of your lines showed potential

to believe that we
would become welthly, and famous
the next generation of aimless teenages on low wagers


but then it look like you just put extra lines in because of the flow.
you didnt really have a topic which is okay, if you can pull it off, work on that.

you ryhme scheme was good, and with a bit of practice and elevation i think that you can become a good writer.

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