Chasing A Dream

People told me the 1st part was dope 'n the 2nd was shit.
So here's a new 2nd

Chasing A Dream

Criticism is motivation, that's ugly and blurred
Above me its stirred, showed me everyone must be concerned
Chasing the dream, but there's a new race everyday
A new struggle to overcome, as many fading away
The brightest shine through the hex of underachievement
Believe it, because I'm stuck there between it
Can't back down from anybody, cause all I need is this game
I have it to play, and hopefully it leads me to fame
I'm blind with no cane, trapped in your forest
The world's a stage, now its my performance
Never gonna give up, this dream..I gotta have it
I need to be clutch, yet I roll in automatics
To be peakin' is tough, when this your love
Hope blood, sweat, 'n tears, build the vision above
Though doubted, I've mounted, never be givin' it up
I pray that skills, will help me slip off the cut


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I like this shit alot. It was real, you know? Speaking technically, I have nothing to complain about.. I'm lovin' the voice your writing takes. It reads like a person talking. Wow.. Good shit man, very good shit. I kind of suck at feedback when I have nothing to bitch about, so.. Yeah. I'll be keeping my eye out for more of your shit.

Hit mine up?

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I'm glad you have nothing to bitch about. 25 views and 1 reply, come on gimme some feed

'Chasing the dream, but there's a new race everyday
A new struggle to overcome, as many fading away'

sick


Very nice flow, a decent wording throughout the whole peice. You did pretty good with this if theres a first part i missed i'd like to see it. Your multis really matched up a bunch and that helped so much. Good shit my dude 7.5/10


return the favor on On Top Of The World

Thanks man, I'll hit yours up tomorrow

real nice not many flaws...decent flow with it only falling once an awhile..

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Chasing the dream, but there's a new race everyday
A new struggle to overcome, as many fading away

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really liked those lines.keep up man i could use some feed on my oms if u have enough time

Some more feedback would be nice