Nothing's better than you. Read this.

I've seen the light..
Though slightly darker than bright
it'll have to suffice.
I write words for my sanity
my vanity blurs, sure
I'm grateful for what you're handing me
I plan to be damaging the misconceptions
caged discretion states objections
ever so readily
steadily I tackle what's ahead of me
let the lesson be learned
but in turn, earn the neccessities
to burn less aggressively
excessively, it's the way that I live
I pray that the shit slows down a bit
before I'm more underground than my spits.
...lost and found the shits that I give...
call it something special
sailing on shattered dreams in a tattered vessel
Call me ignorant, call me arrogant
call me that which tortures your soul
we're all born whole,
then split as the trauma unfolds
coldhearted and desperately seeking
a warmer area lacking this labored breathing
feeding off my own intuition
FUCK your food for thought!
caught in a web of distraught chaos
brought on by the path that I've walked
shot a pigeon in the darkness
label me heartless
but the message was too sincere
for me to part with.
Guarded by innebriation,
I attack the world that I'm facin'
pacin' makes for sore feet
and cracked deliberations
expectations are as expectations do
so I quit giving a shit
cause nothing's better than you.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305395
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...78#post4850478

up.. someone give me feed so I can get another link.

Hmmm...Different to recent oms but not to your previous styles, the structre wasn't great but flow was there not a fast spit flow but more slow, or maybe that because i'm half asleep but w/e....anyway i counted this as a rant on how the world affects the person but the person should care about themselves most as they are most important. Your language was aight in parts and very good in others.

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That was the one line that showed me you have more skill than your letting on with your non specific style.


check this when you get the min, thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305352

Dude... this is not gonna be very well picked up, just so you know ahead of time, cuz honestly it's the shit, man, this flows better then almost everything I ever read on this site. I loved it, personally, but I think I just get the way you want this to rhyme and the suttle messages you're giving with each line. This is really well written, the lines are perfectly short and rhythmically written, I just can't say man, I was really surprised by this. I never expect things to really get me to say "Wow," but this did, and it was solely based on flow, which is my #1 aspect of appreciation.

Anyways, I hope this doesn't get slept on, it's not like a perfect and meaningful OM that gets to you emotionally, but it's still well-done and I see the talent. I loved it, personally. I'll be keeping up with your stuff, you write the style I do, very similar, and i just think it sounds good. Stay up, hit my latest piece if you can do it I'd love to hear your opinion, it's linked.

Ive got a passionate hatred against anybody that tells this guy he hasnt got a good structure.. idiots in OM.. can you follow his flow and his rhymes? yeah you can.. fuck writing in a specific way just so idiots can say ''yeh yo structure was illy''

just because his lines dont go like this
doesnt mean his structure doesnt fit

Anyway.. nice flow Split.. some cool poetic lines in there that caught my eye
let the lesson be learned
but in turn, earn the neccessities
to burn less aggressively
excessively, it's the way that I live
I pray that the shit slows down a bit
before I'm more underground than my spits.
And if ive got this write.. those lines above or on some other level type stuff.. the way the flow [for me] picks up in the 1st few lines and then you say you hope shit slows down.. iunno i migght be wrong.. but if im right .. thats sick lol

ummm alot more lines stuck out to me and this piece was probaly good enough for a nomination.. nice writing

I got Engivale and Pakaveli's some returns.. ^^^Did you have a piece you needed feedback on? Thanks to all by the way... Fucka structure. I can't be confined like that.

The structure was nice, some really nice multis and very smooth flow.

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was dope.

And the multis stuck out for me in

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but in turn, earn the neccessities
to burn less aggressively
excessively, it's the way that I live
I pray that the shit slows down a bit
before I'm more underground than my spits

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7.5/10

Well the flow was decent.. but IMO it wasn;t OMGZOMGZ like everyone said... it sort of was simple and was picked up and dropped at a lot of different points in the piece... some wordplay was decent throughout the piece.... and the emotion was the main element of this piece , made it much better than a standard rant or somehting..

hit up Exact & I's: Eden's Algorithim

^I'll get to it tonight.

Very nice read Split,

This wordplay made the flow come out very nice. I enjoy good wordplay and flow, it makes a good OM or Poem even better. The Creativty and Imagenary were very well put and placed many great images (Almost making a book) in my head. Thankyou for such a great Story plot. 10-10. Please RTF by reading, enjoying and Feeding on my New OM "Voices. Murder. Caught. A Murder Story".