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Criticism is motivation, that's ugly and blurred
Above me its stirred, he showed that everyone is concerned
Chasing the dream, but there's a new race everyday
A new struggle to overcome, as many are fading away
The brightest shine through the hex of underachievement
Believe it, cause I'm stuck there between it
Can't back down from anybody, cause all I have is this game
I have it to play, and hopefully it leads me to fame
Got no control though, I'm doing this solo
Tryna be as smooth as chocolate, yet I'm not rolo
Give me some damn luck, cause it's hate
I shoulda played golf, I'll never get a big break
The path has been unfocused, across the way
It rots my brain, after each exhausting day
I've worked forever through all these years
Only leave 3 things at the court: blood, sweat, tears
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the first half was real good
the last half kinda sucked tho
i didnt really get the topic so it kinda bored me
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ok yes you started off dope man but it dropped off man you started off serious then you threw that rolo line and it was like yeah try to be consistent na mean also you just like dropped your vocab at the end man
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Yeah, the shitty half was bad. I wrote the first 8 lines, they just came one after another. But the others I tried to get to 16 so I could post.
Thnx
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it was pretty good. like the guy up there said the first was good the second half was bad. but it was overall pretty good. keep em comin you got potential. for real.
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this was good.. choppy at some points.. but still tight an held firm
nice lil piece...
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