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Killers Metabolism
The unsolved mystery.
Rushing and gushing evil blood, pumped through veins
It remains the same, even throughout perpetual change
The mortal reaper, is the seeker of carnage and remorse
Captivating urges to altering, gods’ configured course
Following the satanic quarrels, swallowing all morals
Wanting to be laurel, eardrums pop at sound of chorals
No regret, of what was upset, during this evil ritual
Adding abet, to the bloody cassette, was just habitual
Destruction of all good, eruption of a devil’ actions
Reduction of being “hood”, production of a sin faction
Stopping at nothing
….willing to kill
To become something
….still with chill
Farfetched a tale of consumption outstretched soul assumption
Etched in the history, death unknown, no known presumption
He swallows whole, the souls, of the honest and caring
The only goal, is to dull, the lives, of those who are daring
Never stopping to realize, the lives that are being crushed
Those devilish eyes, can never see the system being rushed
For only the characteristic, of the sadistic man has portrayed
The need, to succeed in the, bloody unveiling of his array
Knowing, that pain that he’s caused, but he never paused
While the process called at his cells that continued to gnaw
Organisms can change as do people.
The process had turned, from taking into, to giving out
For years he had yearned for that persistent deadly shout
The crunching at the back of his pupils, couldn’t be stood
The munching at his brain by Satan, wouldn’t be good
However, he has an excuse, a so medical condition
A terribly awful plague, of a strange killing ambition
Sneaking, and peeking, reeking of bloods’ stench
Leaking the need, to lynch his notorious clinch
To fit his bodies’ desires, he needs to always perform
Prolonging the retirement, of his “personal” reform
And so the condition is finally uncovered.
Always the tests, and conclusions had came to none
The condition is Metabolism, the killer has a high one
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this was pretty good
i only read the first part
the vocabulary was nice
too nice
i didnt understand half the song
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thanks.
upping for more feed
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WEll a very interesting read....this had a feel to it and i liked the vocabulary and rythm, the certain multiple rhymes added to the flow and gave the reader more to graps on to. Similary the imagery was very interesting and practically upheld the piece to a certain level. The ending was alsogood as it gave a sense of conclusion and ultimacy to the reader. Not much more to say, this was overall a good piece stay up.
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This was a interesting read as pakaveli said. Good use of vocab skill's and wordplay. Very interesting / gory opener lol. It had a good rhythm to it. The ending gave a great smmary to the reader an concluded it the read. This was a good peice, keep them coming
-Mc Mystique
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yeah i was reading this for real yesterday. and. was mos def feelin it.. flow ws nicee. vocab was executed with deftness... format and structure was worked tigt=htly.........
rhyming ills was dope.........concept was delt with in deepness and added originality to the read.
the hook was.ok.coulda been better tho.. bit short n simple....... b ok.......
i got a bit lost on a few lines. maybe in need of some re-wording.--like--
While the process called at his cells that continued to gnaw
just dont seem right in my view....
i was thinking there's another line like that somewhere . but cant see it now. so anyway,. dope drop still.
i dont know if your new for real. or just a new name ????????, seems like it deserves best rookie spot at-least
props
pz1
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