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Cry for Help (funny)
Cry for Help
i hate fat people but people with fat personalities
even more...
my sisters so addicted to food she startin knockin
on peoples doors..
seriously i need to lock her in a motherfucking
closet dude...
the bitch is getting so fat my dad started
dissing her too...
now i dont have a problem with fat people who
wanna lose weight...
but if i could describe my sisters life in 6 words i'd say:
she ate and ate and ate..
this girls 11 years old and she weighs more than
a tree...
shes so fat we put on her on a diet, and she tried
to eat me...
this girl had all 14 fingers infected, yes she even
ate those...
why 14? she ran out of hands so she started
biting her toes...
i mean the situations desperate some one help
me please...
we cant take her to the supermarket cause she'd
eat all the beans n' cheese...
i don't wanna be explicit but that'd be the end
of the world...
you'd be surprised at how much wind could
fly out of a litle girl...
this isn't a joke people this is a cry for help
via text...
shit she just ate the refrigerator -- i think
i might be next.
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ROFL i was pissing in my pants while i wrote this...
i got pissed at my fat sister for finishing 3 cartons of icecream so i just wanted to blow off some steam...
(yes 3 cartons alone in less than an hour)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=298604
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302759
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...17#post4784317
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please read this :( uppin 1
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ehhh....umm, the only thing i enjoyed about this was the flow, it seems like i was inbetween some kids in the playground, going back and forward saying how fat each other are...
The flow was on point, but the content was weak, i understand that you were going in a humorous direction, but something needs to hold the readers attention...this wasn't it..
...honest feed
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thanks for the feed ;) i wasn't going for anything though i just got pissed at my sister so i keyed this in... it took me like 3 minutes trust me im better than this haha.
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lmfao
yea this funny nigga
i liked da structure of this piece i like da rhyme scheme u used
da story was funny it keep ma attention
but its kinda fucked up that ur cuttin ass and ur sister
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thanks ;) and i don't like my sister a lot...
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this was not the best i read but very good for someone who has not been makeing many pices stay up and bringin stuff like this its a cool pice fo sho
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uppin.. this is a joke btw not a serious piece (for those who fail to understand shyte...)
i wasn;t going for "captivate the reader with big words and make him cry"
i was going for "my sister ate all the fucking icecream and im pissed so ill write a song about how fat she is"
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ok thats cool but go check out my pice
walking you though va
its in my sig
and o yea
this was not a bad piece at all i wouldn't mind collabing with you 1 day and droping a dope pice you got good text skillz
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thanks man ;) ill go check out your piece too :)
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Funny...I agree....but not very hard vocab or nothing, but it was still entertaining...good job kid. hit up my OM in my sig
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UPPIN this drop a link and ill hit
