The Devil's Burden

The Devil's Burden
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Finding souls to ensnare in that eternal lake of sulfur
Forced to hear the shrieks of woman as he sees the flames engulf her
He faces stinging heat without the Son, never pleading for forgiveness
He already knows the end but he's still forced to relive this
Lost the ultimate battle even before its shattered conception
With no perception of the advent of his painful reception
He's called the snake of deception though his sly crawl's been exposed
Because of one surge of ego now his honor stands disposed
Hated and reposed, he seeks comfort through grimy corruption
Those greedy dispose themselves for a dose of neural disruption
He diplays a facade of all-powerful prevalence
While transforming lost hearts into deep-scarred devil tints
Charistmatically tangling his web through the hate-twisted weeds
Ungratefully denying all offers of grace which he needs
He proceeds to torment, causes these tears to torrent
For any heart mangled as his is forever one war-bent
And he'll never repent when he feels no conviction
He speaks misleading words with soothing dereliction
Empty promise of power lures those without moral discernment
Into vile chains of bondage as his dark, wicked servant


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yo thats some good rhyme schemes you got goin shits hot gotta go look at the rest

thanks, upping

I like this I like how your repping God

you had a decent flow..nice vocab and wordplay..keep this shit up girl...goos mettas and multies..some parts could have used work cause it feel off but nice anyway
overall.8/10

Good job this was a really good read, good flow, structure. Metaphors and wordplay was there. nice multis and rhyme scheme. Overall this was a good read. 8.5/10

thanks wow, 2 feeds in 5 minutes lol

return the feed in my OM plz

I will tomorrow when I can focus

upping

meh don't sleep on me

upping

fiya this was a good piece.
had nice vocab n it
ur rhyme scheme was nice
n all it was a good piece
i look forward to seein more

thanks for the feed, upping

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