This Life

You niggaz talk alot of shit
but time is money which explain why i got a lot of it
i got mega millions some like dat lotto shit
growin up makin money really didnt suprise me
i'm just tryin to stop feedin niggaz and spend it wisely
but its kinda hard to end it
being u cant take it wit u so u might as well spend it
house in the hilss floors wit a nice wood finish
5 bedrooms 3 baths and still i live like a menace
dang b that only proves money cant change me
and thats good
cuz most nigga strike it rich and say fuck there hood
not me i rep where i'm from
petersburg niggaz where we serve dummies to the bumbs
and live life how it come
day by day nigga
cuz life like a football game live play by play nigga

aiite topic was umd. ??? . but yeah the layout and delivery was good..
vocab could be a lil more creatice with. flow was good.
had sum cool rhymes poppin.... needa maybe up the metaphore content to give yo flows mo of a twist . and add some more deeper concepts and add real mo emotions so can b felt f'sho. other than that was just to simple and short as fuck

pz1

arite .. hmm how do i put this .. well ... topic was ehh... on that "im rich,look what i got" bullshit which is pretty much 90% of mainstream.......but ... the good thing is ... you had sorta ...a "jadakiss flow" going on ,i could picture kiss spittin that verse ,but my only advice would be Keep It Real ... i mean its ok to use your imagination for topic pieces or w/e ... and get creative w/ punchlines ..
but dont fall into that mainstream cliche' "gangster rap,ima millionaire,ima thug,ima kill you" kinda shit...
... just keep it real ,and real lyricists will feel you no matter what the rhyme scheme is,if its real,real ppl will feel it.

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