Peaceful Storm

Peaceful Storm

Forced to reflect and reminisce on your life during this ghostly night
Overflowed with emotions of sadness and longing, yet still mostly fright
No hopeful light can squeeze it's way through the clouds, not a day of cheer
It's been two years; I wish you'd just appear. I pray that you are here
Lay near me, clear me of my worries, just grasp and clench my brain
For I am soaked in the tears of nature and my own, I am drenched in pain
The entrenched rain and darkness leaves me in solitude, I ponder in thoughts
I squander the clock, time ticks by as I aimlessly wander the blocks
I am lost. In silence I mourn, it's impossible, I cant find my way home
In the shadow of the violent storm....................................I am alone

As the storm rages, seconds seem like ages, I'm searching for a sign
The sights of trees bowing in the wind remind me of your hurting spine
An alerting shine diverted my mind and eyes to the sky for a while
For as the lightning stretched across, I was reminded of you're smile
As the light fades away, a new image seems to form and take its place
In the storm the grey clouds had formed a distinctive image of your face
And in the falling rain, I see the sadness when you were laid to rest
I am reminded, as the streetlights glow, of the heart beneath your chest
I can see you're aging form, oh Lord I pray that you can see me too
In the insecurity of the raging storm....................I can see you

I miss your consistency for caring; I remember how you used to pamper me
I can sense you're longing, for in the rain you're sadness dampens me
Answer me this one question, will you watch me and bring me no harm?
A sign of response, as the wind blows; I can feel you touching my arm
The ghostly clutch alarms, it lightly presses expressing you're vintage
And as I enter a cluster of fog, I can feel your phantasmal image
Have I finally found you? Have I discovered what I deeply sought?
And with the eye of the storm just overhead, I sensed I was being watched
My life is but tragically norm, for one night I wish I could heal you
In the craziness of this magical storm.................I can feel you

You were here, but so suddenly you disappeared, now I'm left scowling after
And as the wind violently blew, I was reminded of your howling laughter
Startled I jump as the thunder cracks, it's close so I'm assuming there's danger
But my mind is set to ease, for now I miss your voice, even booming with anger
With the cool breeze, from nearby trees I can hear a rustle in the leaves
And then I know you're using them, for I can hear you whisper to me
In the near distance I can hear, the flailing chimes ringing a wonderful noise
And I am instantly reminded of you, when you're singing your wonderful voice
In a flash, lightning is born; your supernatural presence makes me fear you
In the terror of the frightening storm......................I can hear you

With this spiritual night surrounding me, I am forced to reflect on you
And now that I look back on the times, I fear that I may have neglected you
Rejected you, and it pains me to think that I didn’t get to know you well enough
But now that you're gone I miss you, and your absence is making life tough
It's rough, but even out in the cold, for some reason I feel I'm at home
And even though I'm consumed in loneliness, I feel that I am not alone
I felt as though I was falling through space, but you lifted me and helped me dangle
You're presence is evident, and now I understand, that you're my guardian angel
All night I sit on the streets and mourn, until finally, it hits me
In the comfort of this peaceful storm.................I know you're with me

R.I.P Grandma. I miss you.



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hot drop..i liked the major flow
i also liked the mettas..good multies
also...you stayed on it..and kept going wit da flow..
hot shit...your getting more complex evey drop...
i liked the creativty in the vocab..hot drop homie..
overall=9.6/10..nice shit homie..keep it up..............

fo rizzle... elevation is the key homie... u'll see a new 1 in a couple days

that shit was prettydamn hot my nigga. the only bad part was that shit was super loooooooooooooooooooong. sorry bout ya grandma. you had a good structure and the whole thing made since from beggining to end. i like the first two lines the most though about the fright and shit. good work ill be lookin forward to some more of yo om.

haha have a nice long read? thanks MOB

miss your consistency for caring; I remember how you used to pamper me
I can sense you're longing, for in the rain you're sadness dampens me
Answer me this one question, will you watch me and bring me no harm?
A sign of response, as the wind blows; I can feel you touching my arm
my fav part.

Creativity was really nice u kept it up for the whole peice which made it a creative drop
Imagery was really good prolly one of the best aspect of the whole drop
Emotion i was feelin u really had alot emotion in this peiece which made it even better
Flow was on for the whole drop it didnt really fall off at any time
Rhyme Scheme was really nice but weak in some parts u couldve worked on that
Vocabulary was sick u had some really good fukin vocab in this drop
Wordplay was nice thru the whole peice it didnt fall of much but it did it a couple of lines
The Beginning was a bit slow for me which didnt really get me into the piece
The Middle is when i started to get into it..it just really caught my eye
The End was prolly the best part of the drop but i really liked the way u closed this peiece overall really good peice but its to fukin long to read lmfao now fuck you stop bugging me

hehe now doesnt it feel better 2 get that over with?

fuck rb is lazy... remind me not to expand my creativity nemore and make my pieces shorter

Creativity and Imagery were good they kept on top all through the drop.
Vocabulary and Wordplay was decent it wasn't to shabby.
Rhymescheme just to weak in some places but good overall.
The way you ended the piece was best of all.
Emotion throughout i thought was excellant thats what made it better than it was.
Overall a good drop keep going at it a bit weak in some places but they not major so well done.
8.75/10

sexyness... lol thanks man i owe u one...

ALLRIGHT: realistcally yur piece was good, im just gonna be real with ya.....i think at points you tried to gather some good writing techinques in the second stanza...however i think you need to work on your emotions...they seemed almost forced, look to some annonance if you wanna elevate...but despite i think you have amazing talent, but focus your energy at times you sorta stray.....im looking forward to the next read, its good to see some talent in om.

Aight i like the real feed cuz i can actually learn from it... next OM is gonna b alot different and not my style really, but im jsut trying somethin new... so i'll make sure ur the 1st 2 read

rise fools

nice shit nuh! it was deep