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Nearly A Month Missing
God gave me style and gave me glossolalia
speaking within the native tongues of this rhyme-mania
having my enemies dremped in lenity
like two powerful forces clashing while their aurora is killing me
i know my shit is a bit complex
thats why i think 3-D style to build on top like an architect
but on the other hand i got a license to kill
got beef with rappers on the side of my dish mostly like a full course meal
and nope i aint being dillusional this one's real
from, spaced-out rappers to actors its time for my hate not to be concealed
by any means nessecary to be crazed like a psychopath
i have been fucked and shitted on and now I look back and laugh
how I barely made it through the hard times and the rough tasks
thought that i'd never get my freedom words published
not trying to be the voice of God through all this mayhem and ruckus
whatever, ya intelligent writers wouldn't never understand so...fuck this
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this is goin to take a while. remember to speak your mind and tell the truth. tell me something good or bad so i could do better. help your fellow member out. uppin for feed
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nice shit..nice vocab..bad strcure..nice wordplay..alright flow...you need work on mettas..and your multis were good...you nee to put more complexity and be more complex wit ya flow..even tho it was hot..keep it up tho dude..
overall.8/10
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thanks man still uppin for you know what people.
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iight vocab, that was your high point, your flow was also iight, you should add multi's to affect your rhyme skeme and flow, your imagery could use some work too... when people read a topical its important they see through the eyes of the persons eye-witnessed account- or atleast somewhat near, now im not sayin tremendous detail is necessary but it does show in the end. keep at it tho, you have alot of potential
7/10
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thanks for the advice. uppin for more
